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一篇英文文章的文法改正問題

我這篇文章中有哪些錯誤呢? 麻煩高手過目 , 並改正過來!

***** Internet World *****

Today , most people have the experience about net play . For it save our time in doing many things. For example , I can buy no matter books、clothes、foods or other things .Through the internet I amn't need go out for shopping . It is indeed convenient that I can get informations quickly. The advantages of internet are numerously. Such as , I can make friends by the chatting room and send letters without stamps、book an air ticket、make reservations for hotel rooms、pay taxes、NetShow....Beside, it can link to the stock market and take a NetMeeting and so on .....

Though the good points of the internet are numerous, but it has some defects. For example, many people commit crimes through the internet. Take buying things for example . The consumers was invigled to pay in advance and then disappear with the money . Besides, sex transactions often occure in the chatting room as we see the news on the TV. Speaking of the e-mail , although it is an efficient way for saving our time . But the large amount of junk mails often crack my mail-box.

I think, may it's the sequela from internet technology world !

已更新項目:

最後一句是 ; 我認為 , 這大概就是網路科技所帶來的後

遺症吧 .

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    Ok, for starters, the grammatical errors are not as serious as some that I have seen, but there are a lot of usage and terminology errors. So I am going to do this one or two sentences at a time.

    "Today , most people have the experience about net play . For it save our time in doing many things. "

    Today, most people have experiences surfing the Internet because it saves us time in many ways.

    (I am not quite sure what do you mean by "net play." I think you mean "surfing the Internet.")

    "For example , I can buy no matter books、clothes、foods or other things. Through the internet I amn't need go out for shopping. "

    For example, I can buy books, clothes, food or many other things. Through the Internet, I do not need to go outside to shop.

    ("no matter" is a direct translation from Chinese. DON'T ever use it in that way. If you have to, use something like "I can buy many things on the Internet, whether they are books, clothes, food or any other items.")

    "It is indeed convenient that I can get informations quickly. The advantages of internet are numerously."

    The Internet is indeed convenient because I can get information quickly, and its advantages are numerous.

    ("information" cannot be counted -- so no "s" at the end. TRY not to start a sentence with "it" unless you have to. It is a style issue." The word "that" is used here to connect modifiers, and should not be used to describe "convenient." I think you are trying to say that "it is convenient because..." )

    "Such as , I can make friends by the chatting room and send letters without stamps、book an air ticket、make reservations for hotel rooms、pay taxes、NetShow....Beside, it can link to the stock market and take a NetMeeting and so on ..... "

    For example, I can make friends through the chat rooms, send letters without stampes, book an airline ticket, make reservations for hotel rooms, pay taxes and use programs such as NetShow. In addition, I can also connect to the stock market and take a NetMeeting.

    "Though the good points of the internet are numerous, but it has some defects. For example, many people commit crimes through the internet. Take buying things for example . The consumers was invigled to pay in advance and then disappear with the money."

    Although there are many benefits to the Internet, it also has some defects. For example, many people commit crimes through the internet. In some cases, consumers were enticed to pay in advance for goods but the seller later disappeared with the money.

    "Besides, sex transactions often occure in the chatting room as we see the news on the TV. Speaking of the e-mail , although it is an efficient way for saving our time . But the large amount of junk mails often crack my mail-box. "

    In addition, sex transactions often occurred through chatroom as we have seen through the news reports on TV. In the case of e-mails, although it is an efficient way to save time, there are also large amount of junk mails that often fill my mail-box.

    I think, may it's the sequela from internet technology world !

    (I have no idea what you are trying to say here... so maybe you can type it in Chinese for me.)

  • 1 0 年前

    Nowadays, most people have the experiences about Net-playing. For it saves our time in doing many things. For example, I can buy different books, clothes, food or other things. Through the Internet, I don't need to go out for shopping. It is nedeeded convenient that I can get information quickly. The advantages of the Internet are numerously such as, I can make friends by chatting, send letters without stamps, books, flight tickets, make hotel rooms reservation, pay taxes, and NetShow. Besides, it can link to the stock exchange market and net meetings as well.

    Thought, the advantages of the Internet are numerous but it has some issuses. For example, many people commit crimes through the Internet. For example, consumers buy things online and pay in advnace; however, sellers might just take the payment away. In addition, sexual topics are discussed in public chatting rooms. Speaking of the e-mail, although it is an efficient way to save our time on delivering mails, but usually users receive huge amount of junk emails instead of useful information, and it causes some other issues as well.

    I think that this is what we called "The Internet Technology World"!

    參考資料: 我直接打了一次新的~..有改了一些地方~
  • 1 0 年前

    I concur

    i see no thesis statement whatsoever

    poor body organization

    too many grammar errors

    no conclusion at all

    and too many same-style sentences

    overall: let's not make any comments here

    Please work on your grammar first, or it's just a murder,

    the victim is literature

  • 1 0 年前

    Today, most people have some experiences with net play, for it saves our time in doing many things. For example, I can buy any books, cloths, and foods that I want through the internet instead of going out for shopping. It is indeed conveinet that I can get information quickly. The advantages that internet can bring us are numerous; I can make friends in the chatting room, send letters without stamps, book air tickets, make reservation for hotel rooms, pay taxes, and watch the NetShow. Besides, I can also get the latest information in the stock market and participate in NetMeetings through the internet.

    Although the internet gives us lots of benefits, it still has some defects, and one of which is that many people commit crimes through the internet. Take buying things as an example, consumers may be asked to pay in advance but never get things which they've paid for. Besides, as we have seen on TV news, sex transactions often appear in the chatting rooms. And about the e-mail, it is really a way of saving time, but the large amount of the junk mails often crack my mail-box and become so annoying!

    (Sorry~~ don't understand your last sentence)

    參考資料: me
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  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前

    Take buying things for example

    這一句我喜歡...很有我的style的感覺

    嘿嘿嘿

    但是這一句是很Taiwan Style的講法

    怎麽講...

    類似

    你好嗎

    you good mah??嘿嘿

    2005-03-11 12:53:44 補充:

    自己也很多作文要寫

    大概講一下

    most people have experiences in surfring internet, for it save our time in doing many things..

    這裡for可以用..前面的改成逗號

    i can buy books, cl..

    through the internet, i don't need to go out....或許 don't have to...比較好

    the advantages........ nemerously直接 such as making friends, sending letters, booking...這樣比較快...簡單....

    though...不要用在這裡

    改成even though the good points...... , it has....直接放逗號it has

    take buying things for example...很有我這個Professor of Taiwan Style的風格

    我喜歡...但是...這句是錯的

    自己想怎麽改

    speaking of the e-mail

    這裡開始完全錯了

    要說although speaking of the e-mail...但是...我也不知道你到底要說什麽叫speaking of the e-mail..你是指透過通訊軟體聊天吧...

    反正我不理你就對了...自己想怎麽改

    只是告訴你

    although要在最前面....然後but就不要放了

    although speaking.......our time..... , the large amount of junks of.....

    i think it might the sequela.....

    有沒有逗號都沒關係

    你的英文算不錯.繼續加油

    給你個hint...所有的英文句子都是subject+ verb+ object組成的

    只要你的句子是這樣組成的

    通常都沒問題了

    至於連接詞的用法...for and nor but or yet so就要在學一下這些都不會在句子的前面..至於有人用的話....要看情形...網路我解釋不清楚...

    還有其他類似because因爲

    中文一定是因爲所以

    但是英文可不會有because ........so...

    though......but...雖然...但是....英文裏面不需要有但是了

    還有很多要學習的地方

    加油吧.....

    2005-03-11 14:00:27 補充:

    .....你們這些人要求很多人

    初級的人寫作文有這樣不錯了呢

    你們到底要求多高呀..受不了

    2005-03-13 05:23:41 補充:

    我個人覺得幫你把一句句子從組沒有意思..因爲你所不會的是文法

    並不是你詞彙不夠..當然也不夠...

    可是我從你的文章看到的都是文法結構的問題.類似連接詞還有subject verb object agreement的問題..所以才告訴你該怎麽運用更改...因爲這很基礎...所以必須學..因爲如果到了高級一點的英文...你不會基礎文法那文章還是會很多錯誤..其實在你這個程度作文考的只是文法..至於内容就令當別論了

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