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For my dearest elva:

Today I saw two movies, which is “大合拜金女?(Japan)” and “Troy”, those two movies are marvelous. I like the plot and the performance by the movie star. The former is mentioned a female flight attendant loves to date with different kinds of rich people. However, I don’t think she will give up the relationship with the person who can give her a truly emotion and make her happy. To tell you the truth, I didn’t watch it over, so I didn’t know the outcome of this movie (series?). The latter one, which is Troy, described a “wooden horse” to end a tough war in the end. The two sincerely love happened in this movie make me feel impressed. Their love like a king stone, men fight for their lovers, what’s more, they willing to sacrifice themselves to protect them. Can I call this kind of love as “eternality?” Turn to another point; I think women are very pity, because men always blame the mistake to them. The war was blamed to Helen (Although we know the “real” problem is the “king.”)

Today’s weather is bad as these days. It rained cats and dogs. I don’t like it because I always get wet on raining day. I hope this phenomenon can pass quickly, and I can see the sunshine again. But actually, the rain cools down the hot temperature. You may know that Chia-Yi is quite hot in the summer time. Last summer, I stayed here for camping and teaching in Mt. Ali; however, I won’t do it again, because the weather is really hot and the summer sun is always killing people.

As for apples, I am still waiting for them. I think it will be the best ones. I hope it will not cost you a lot, or I will feel sorry.

As the picture, just use your digital camera to take one for me is totally enough. You don’t have to dress up too beauty (although you said that you are extremely beauty before.) (Secret from the heart: An old Chinese wisdom.” Female will dress up for their lover.”) Okay! Don’t let me wait so long (I am afraid that the KFC’s ad, which a girl is waiting something till she is become an old woman.)

I am glad you can trust me more and more, and willing to be my “close” friend? (You mentioned at last letter.) I feel like fly in the heaven (sort of exaggerate, but the feeling is beyond description.) Wait! Something flash into my mind, I seemed to hear that you have a website and want to give me your personal information more detailed. If the one day you can let me enter your “secret world,” I would find more treasure from you, and would be more cherish you than now.

It has been a long time not written for you in this kind of long paragraph. But I still can know you more from every talk and letter. Do your work better before talk to me, because I don’t want to be your barrier or burden.

In the end, I want to speak my heart. These days, when I feel under a lot of pressure, the first thing I want to do is to talk to you. So sometimes you will be my mental counselor. When I feel happy, I also want to talk to you, because “sharing” can make us closer. I addicted to talk to you these days; however, I thought it is not a good thing, because I don’t know when I can bother you (maybe you can use the “situation” to warn me.) What’s important, you can share your sorrow and happiness to me sometimes. Ha! It’s time for my to stop the letter, or this letter will be endless.

Feel free to let me know you need my help or something else. Take care (The weather is not steady recently. Be carefully!)

Sincerely yours.

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  • 2 0 年前
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    Some suggestion for the choice of word and sentense, thank you and best luck for the becoming "eternity"

    For my dearest elva: Dear/Beloved Elva,

    Today I saw(watched) two movies, which is(are) “大合拜金女?(Japan)” and “Troy”,. Those(These) two movies are marvelous. I like the plot (of the movie) and the performance by the movie star(actors’ performance). The former(The first movie) is mentioned(about) a female flight attendant(a flight stewardess) loves to date with different kinds of(delete) rich people. However, I don’t think she will give up the relationship with the person who can give her a truly emotion(true feeling) and make her happy. To(delete) tell you the truth, I didn’t watch it over(I have not finished the movie), so I didn’t know the outcome(ending) of this movie (series?). The latter one(The second one), which is(delete) Troy, described(talks about) a “wooden horse”(the wooden horse legend) to end(win) a tough war in the end. The two sincerely love(The love power between two persons) happened in this movie(delete) make me feel(delete) impressed. Their love is like a king stone. Men fight for their lovers( the one they love), what’s more inspiring is that they willing to sacrifice themselves to protect them. Can I call this kind of love as “eternality(eternity)?” Turn to another point, I think women are very pity, because men always blame the mistake to them(blame them the mistakes they made). The war was blamed to Helen (People blame Helen for the ware) although we know the “real” problem is the “king.”

    Today’s weather is bad as(delete) these days. It rained like cats and dogs. I don’t like it because I always get wet on raining day(in the rain). I hope this phenomenon can pass quickly, and I can see the sunshine again. But, actually, the rain cools down the hot temperature. You may know that Chia-Yi is quite hot in the summer time. Last summer, I stayed here for camping and teaching in Mt. Ali; however, I won’t do it again, because the weather is really hot and the summer sun is always killing people.

    As for apples, I am still waiting for them. I think it(they) will be the best ones. I hope it will not cost you a lot, or I will feel sorry.

    As the picture, just use your digital camera to take one for me(Photo from digital camera) is totally enough. You don’t have to dress up too beauty (be too dressed up)(although you said that you are extremely beauty(beautiful) before.) (Secret from the heart: An old Chinese wisdom saying.” Female will dress up for their lover.”) Okay! Don’t let me wait so long (I am afraid that(Don’t be like) the KFC’s ad, which a girl is waiting something till she is become an old woman.) (a girl is waiting so long that she becomes old)

    I am glad you can trust me more and more, and are willing to be my “close” friend? (You mentioned that from last letter.) I feel like flying in the heaven (sort of exaggerating, but the feeling is beyond description.) Wait! Something flashs into my mind, I seem to hear that you have(create) a website and want to give me your personal detailed information. If the one(some) day you can let me enter your “secret world,” I would find more treasure from you(understand you more), and would be more cherish you(cherish you more) than now.

    It has been a long time not written you long paragraph(letter), but I still can know you more and more from every talk and letter(the conversation we have every day). Do your work better before talk to me(Do you perform better in your work?), because I don’t want to be your barrier or burden.

    In the end, I want to speak from my heart. These days. When I feel under a lot of pressure, the first thing I want to do is to talk to you and you are my mental counselor. When I feel happy, I also want to talk to you, because “sharing” can make us closer. I am addicted to talking with you these days. However, I thought it is not a good thing(idea), because I don’t know when I can bother you(you are free) (maybe you can use the “situation” to warn me.) What’s more important is that you can share your sorrow and happiness with me anytime you like. Ha! It’s time for me to stop, or this letter will be endless.

    Feel free to let me know you need my help or something else. Take care (The weather is not steady recently. Be carefully!)

    yours,

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  • 匿名使用者
    2 0 年前

    大和拜金女是"Yamato Nadeshiko"

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  • 2 0 年前

    TO my dearest elva:

    I WATCHED TWO MOVIES TODAY. THEY ARE “大合拜金女?(Japan)” and “Troy”. THESE two movies are marvelous. I like the plot and the performance by the movie star. The former mentioned IS a female flight attendant WHO loves DATING with different kinds of rich people. However, I don’t think THAT she will give up A relationship with A person who IS ABLE TO give her TRUE HAPPINEESS. To tell you the truth, I didn’t FINISH WATCHING THE MOVIE, so I didn’t know the outcome of this movie (series?). The latter one, Troy, IS ABOUT a “wooden horse” WHICH endED a tough war AT the end. WHAT IMPRESSED ME IN THE MOVIE IS THE LOVE BETWEEN THE TWO KINGDOMS. Their love IS like a king stone. Men fight for their lovers. What’s more, they ARE willing to sacrifice themselves to protect them. Can I call this kind of love as “eternality?” ON THE OTHER HAND, I PITY THE WOMEN, because men always blame the mistakeS to them. THEY BLAMED HELEN FOR BEING THE CAUSE OF THE WAR. (Although we know THAT the “real” problem is the “king.”)

    Today’s weather is bad as THE PAST FEW DAYS. It rained cats and dogs. I don’t like it because I always get wet on raining dayS. I hope this phenomenon can pass quickly, SO THAT I AM ABLE TO see the sunshine again. But actually, the rain cools down the hot temperature. You may know that Chia-Yi is quite hot DURING SUMMER. Last summer, I CAMPED HERE AND TAUGHT IN Mt. Ali. However, I won’t do it again, because the weather is really hot and the summer sun is always killing people.

    As for apples, I am still waiting for them. I think it will be the best ones. I hope it will not cost you a lot, or I will feel sorry.

    As FOR the picture, just use your digital camera to take one for me. You don’t have to dress up too beautIFULLY (although you said that you are extremely beauty before.) (Secret from the heart: An old Chinese wisdom.” Female will dress up for their lover.”) Okay! Don’t let me wait so long (I am afraid that the KFC’s ad, which a girl is waiting something till she is become an old woman.)

    I am glad THAT ARE TRUSTING ME MORE AND MORE, and ARE willing to be my “close” friend? (You mentioned IN THE last letter.) I feel like flyING in heaven (sort of exaggeratING, but the feeling is beyond description.) Wait! Something flashED into my mind, I HEARD that you have a website and I HOPE THAT YOU WOULD GIVE ME YOUR PERSONAL INFORMATION IN A MORE DETAILED FORM. If one day you WERE TO let me enter your “secret world,” I would find more treasureS ABOUT you, and I WOULD TREASURE YOU MORE COMPARED TO NOW.

    It has been a long time THAT I HAVE NOT WRITTEN TO you in this kind of long paragraphS. But I CAN STILL KNOW YOU MORE FROM EVERY CONVERSATION AND LETTER. IMPROVE ON YOUR WORK before talk to me, because I don’t want to be your barrier or burden.

    LASTLY, I WOULD LIKE to speak FROM my heart. These days, when I HAVE BEEN under a lot of pressure,AND the first thing I want to do is to talk to you. Sometimes you ARE my mental counselor. When I feel happy, I also want to talk to you because “sharing” can make us closer. I AM addicted to talkING to you these days; however, I thought THAT it is not a good thing, because I don’t know when I AM BOTHERING you (maybe you can use the “situation” to warn me.) What’s important, you can share your sorrowS and happiness to me sometimes. Ha! It’s time for my to stop the letter, or this letter will be endless.

    Feel free to let me know you need my help or something else. Take care (The weather is not steady recently. BE CAREFUL!)

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  • 匿名使用者
    2 0 年前

    我愛死這種充滿感情的信耶!!!

    妳也可以寄給我啦

    我的email是.............

    Dearest Elva:

    Today I watched two movies, the “Yamato Nadeshiko(a Japanese Flight Attendant)” and the “Troy”, they both were marvelous. I like the plot and acting. The former one was about a female flight attendant who loved to date with different kind of rich people. However, I don’t think she would give up the relationship with the person who could give her a truly passion and make her happy. To tell you the truth, I didn’t reach the end, so I didn’t know the outcome of this movie (series?). The latter one, which was Troy, described a “wooden horse” which ended a tough war finally. The two sincere love affairs in this movie were impressive. Their love liked a diamond, men fighted for their lovers, what’s more, they were willing to sacrifice themselves to protect their lovers. Please allow me to call this kind of love as “eternality”. On another hand, I think the women were pitiful, because the men always blamed them for the mistake. The war was blamed to Helen (Although we know the “real” problem was the “King.”)

    Today’s weather is bad as one of these days. It rained cats and dogs. I don’t like it because I always get wet on raining day. I hope this weather pattern can pass quickly, so that I can see the sunshine again. Actually, the rain cools down the high temperature. You may know that Chia-Yi is quite hot in the summer. Last summer, I stayed here for camping and teaching in Mt. Ali; however, I won’t do it again, because the weather is really hot and the summer sun is almost killing.

    As for apples, I am still waiting for them. I think it will be the best ones. I hope it will not cost you a lot, or I will feel embarrassed.

    As the picture, just use your digital camera to take one for me is just enough. You don’t have to dress up too much (although you said that you are extremely beautiful before.) (Secret from the heart: An old Chinese wisdom.” Female dresses up for lover.”) Okay! Don’t let me wait too long (I am afraid that the KFC’s ad, in which a girl had been waiting for something till she became an old woman.)

    I am glad you can trust me more and more, and willing to be my “close” friend? (You mentioned in your last letter.) I feel like fly in the heaven (sort of exaggerating, but the feeling is beyond description.) Wait! Something flash into my mind, I seemed to hear that you have a website and want to give me your personal information and more detailed. If you can let me enter your “secret world” one day, I would find more treasure of you, and would be able to share more of you than now.

    It has been a long time that I have not written this kind of long paragraph to you. But I am getting to know you more from every talk and letter. Finish your work before talk to me, because I don’t want to be your burden or causing barrier.

    At the end, I want to speak my heart. These days, when I feel under a lot of pressure, the first thing I want to do is to talk to you. You are my mental counselor. When I am happy, I also want to talk to you, because “sharing” draws us closer. I am addicted to talk to you these days; however, I thought it is not a good thing, because I don’t know if I am bothering you (maybe you have to warn me if that’s the case) It’s important that you can share your sorrow and happiness with me. Ha! It’s time for my to stop the letter, or this letter will be endless.

    Feel free to let me know if I can be at your help or anything. The weather is not steady recently. Be carefully! Take care!

    Sincerely yours.

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  • 2 0 年前

    只看了一句就不想看勒.which is .改成are..是兩部影片怎會用單數呢

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