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緊急~請找出文章的錯誤!!!

這篇是我寫的文章....

請看完這篇文章 糾正出錯的地方..謝謝

When I was a child, my ambition was to be a boss, so I can make a lot of money.

To become a boss, I wanted to be a fashion designer, which is a wonderful job that symbolizes popularity and beautiful. Of course, I am also born with a talent in aesthetic and imagination. So I have the hunch strongly that I could be a good fashion designer.

However, time flies. As I grow up, I realize that I am not patience enough and not ability enough to play a good role, which has made me give up the ambition of being a fashion designer. Now I want to be a chairman like Coco Chanel. There are two reasons. First, I can ear more money. The other reason is that my company will be a well-known and international brand. It is a luxury and sumptuous job, which requires discernment, racy and characteristic.

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  • 2 0 年前
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    when i was.... so [so that] i can [could] 同一句話用同一時態

    boss老闆 fasion designer 設計師 那你是想自己開店當設計師嗎

    then you can say [when i was a child, i wanted to be a fashion designer to make lots of money]把兩句合併 你題目要找文章的錯誤 兩句是沒錯可是看的複雜

    popularity is a noun and beautiful is adj.

    ... symbolizes [popularity and beauty]設計這行業是代表流行與美麗 是你要講的ㄇ

    [i was born...art and...] aesthetic is adj.

    i have...i could 如果這段是用過去是全部用過去式

    however, time flies... don't put timeflies just However, as i grow up, ..i am not [patient] what do u mean by ability what kind ability

    ..,which [that] 用that 把逗號去掉 that makes me give up....

    there are two reason: .... ear [earn]

    注意時態

    只是文法部分差不多就這些不過文章流暢度勸你多念幾次 有些地方邏輯怪怪的

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