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各位大大。幫幫忙。不知是否有錯誤。請幫我更改!15點!

我有一篇遊記。。需要各位大大幫我確認一下!

中文版本

炎熱的夏天是不是讓你熱到想要跳進水裡好好衝個涼呢?今天我去月眉馬拉灣玩唷!真的是很涼快!那裡有很多遊樂設施,讓你玩都玩不完!

首先,先來介紹最有名的大海嘯:世界最大露天人工造浪池,在全場都咚咚嘿的興奮喊聲中,一起迎接超級猛浪的來臨,不管是被轟天浪蓋火鍋的痛快、或是在方塊浪享受水中跳舞、還是在鑽石浪中神秘幽浮,都是獨一無二的玩水經驗!

下一個,介紹可怕的極速勇士:高空快速滑水道,懼高症的地獄挑戰,不管是從密閉黑洞瞬間垂直下墜、或是兩段式噴射彈出、還是在彩虹滑道團團轉,上衝下洗的精辣體驗,要你變成高分貝尖叫的自由落體!

再來,介紹緩和的漂漂河:漂流式SPA河道,情人最愛明星設施,猶如戀愛巴士水上版,進入這條270公尺長的天然浪漫流域,沿路充滿鳥語花香與水瀑驚奇,用最舒服的姿勢順流而下,帶你陷入愛河傳說!

之後,介紹機關最多的阿酋彎:IPS互動式親水城堡,藏著各式親水機關,走迷宮打水仗,還有單人雙人滑水艇任你選,酋長冰桶的淋洗禮,更是不可錯過的清涼行程,天天都是潑水節,讓你全身濕濕熱!

最後,為你介紹兒童專用的思瑪湖:在這座快樂水天堂中,可以做在水晶涼亭裡欣賞貝殼和海星、可以成著烏龜、螃蟹悠遊娃娃河……趕快帶著小朋友,到海角樂園摸魚去摟!

肚子餓了嗎?這裡也有主題餐廳唷!有Luau河岸碳烤、Farm House農莊小點、Mafe瑪啡屋、Coco`s椰果吧,讓您體驗馬拉美食嘉年華!

聽完了我的敘述,心動了嗎?心動不如馬上行動!

英文版本

The blazing hot summer makes you hot to want to jump into water cool? Today I go to the Yamay Molo Boy to play! Really is very pleasantly cool! There has a lot of play the facilities, let you play to all play not over!

First, come to introduce the most well-known Big Wave: Biggest and open-air artificial in world builds the wave pool, In whole fields all the excitement of the Hey of Dong Dong shouting voice, greet the approach of the super and fierce wave together, BE in spite of bombed a day, wave cover chafing dish of happy,or dance and is still a mysterious UFO in a wave enjoying water in the diamond wave, All play the water experience the one and only!

Next, introduce the terrible Aumuhu:High empty water-ski the way quickly, the hellish challenge of the acrophobia, ignore to crash down from the closeness black hole moment perpendicularity,or two type jet flicks open,or run round in circles in the slippery way of rainbow up hurtling under the hot experience of the that wash, want you to become the high-pitched scream to fall the body freely!

Then, the introduction mollifies of Lazy River:The driftage type SPA course of river, lover favourite star facilities, as if be in love the aquatic version of the bus, enter this 270 meters of natural and romantic river valleys that grow, follows the road to be filled with birds' twitter and fragrance of flower is surprising with waterfalls, drifts down the river with the most comfortable posture, bring you to sink in to love the river legend!

After, introduce the organization most A-Chu Slideses:The IPS interaction type gets close to water fortress, hide every kind of get close to water organization, walk the maze kick battle, also has the single a person to water-ski the boat to allow you to choose, the Tribal chief ice bucket pours the baptism, is also the fresh and cool route of travel that can't miss, all splash water the stanza every day, let the wet hot and damp of your whole body!

End, introduce the Sumahu of child's appropriation for you:Here in the happy water heaven, can do in the crystal arbor and appreciate the shell and starfish and can become the tortoise,crab to visit the doll river …… leisurely to bring the kid at once, go to the cape!

Did you feel hungry?There is the topic restaurant here, too!Have the Luau,Farm House,Mafe,Coco`s, let you experience personally the delicacy carnival!

Do you hear my description through, move?Move rather to act right away!

※如果有錯誤。。請幫我更改成正確的在打出來給我!謝謝!

已更新項目:

我英文不是很好,所以有很多錯誤造成你的困擾,但是希望你可以幫到底,幫我把所有的更改過來。謝謝!

2 個已更新項目:

我真ㄉ很抱歉辣。。。因為我是英文ㄉ初學者。。。不太會翻譯。。。有些還是用翻譯軟體翻ㄉㄋ。。。所以錯誤連篇。。。希望各位大大可以幫我更改。。。或是直接重新翻譯。。。謝謝~

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  • 延德
    Lv 6
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    幫你改了兩段後發現問題很多. 改過的地方都以大寫標出

    首先是句子完整性的問題. 最基本的句子要包含主詞和動詞. 複雜點的還要加上受詞來接受主詞所做的動作.

    先檢查一下, 試著用英文直接寫作, 絕對不要先寫好中文稿再試圖翻譯. 這只會給自己找麻煩.

    改過再 POST 上來吧

    加加油!!

    炎熱的夏天是不是讓你熱到想要跳進水裡好好衝個涼呢?今天我去月眉馬拉灣玩唷!真的是很涼快!那裡有很多遊樂設施,讓你玩都玩不完!

    DOESN’T the HOT blazing summer MAKE you FEEL LIKE to jump into water TO COOL DOWN? I WENT TO the Yamay Molo BAY TODAY AND IT WAS REALLY A REFRESHING EXPERIENCE. There ARE SO MANY RECREATION facilities IN THE WATER PARK THAT YOU CAN NEVER GET TIRED OF.

    首先,先來介紹最有名的大海嘯:世界最大露天人工造浪池,在全場都咚咚嘿的興奮喊聲中,一起迎接超級猛浪的來臨,不管是被轟天浪蓋火鍋的痛快、或是在方塊浪享受水中跳舞、還是在鑽石浪中神秘幽浮,都是獨一無二的玩水經驗!

    First OF ALL, ALLOW ME TO introduce the most well-known Big Wave. IT IS THE biggest OUTDOORS artificial WAVE POOL in THE world. PEOPLE ARE SO EXCITED AND SHOUT AS LOUD AS POSSIBLE AS EVERY fierce wave APPROACHES. PEOPLE ENJOY THE FUN WHEN THE WAVES COMING DOWN FROM THE SKY TO THEIR HEADS. THEY dance IN THE SQUARE WAVES and BECOME a mysterious UFO in the diamond WAVES. All OF THESE ARE UNIQUE water PARK experience FOR THEM.

    Next, introduce the terrible Aumuhu:High empty water-ski the way quickly, the hellish challenge of the acrophobia, ignore to crash down from the closeness black hole moment perpendicularity,or two type jet flicks open,or run round in circles in the slippery way of rainbow up hurtling under the hot experience of the that wash, want you to become the high-pitched scream to fall the body freely!

    Then, the introduction mollifies of Lazy River:The driftage type SPA course of river, lover favourite star facilities, as if be in love the aquatic version of the bus, enter this 270 meters of natural and romantic river valleys that grow, follows the road to be filled with birds' twitter and fragrance of flower is surprising with waterfalls, drifts down the river with the most comfortable posture, bring you to sink in to love the river legend!

    After, introduce the organization most A-Chu Slideses:The IPS interaction type gets close to water fortress, hide every kind of get close to water organization, walk the maze kick battle, also has the single a person to water-ski the boat to allow you to choose, the Tribal chief ice bucket pours the baptism, is also the fresh and cool route of travel that can't miss, all splash water the stanza every day, let the wet hot and damp of your whole body!

    End, introduce the Sumahu of child's appropriation for you:Here in the happy water heaven, can do in the crystal arbor and appreciate the shell and starfish and can become the tortoise,crab to visit the doll river …… leisurely to bring the kid at once, go to the cape!

    Did you feel hungry?There is the topic restaurant here, too!Have the Luau,Farm House,Mafe,Coco`s, let you experience personally the delicacy carnival!

    Do you hear my description through, move?Move rather to act right away!

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    UFO怎麼會跟馬拉灣有關真是~~

    參考資料: 眼和腦
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