this anternoon i went the park to exercise as usual.
but today i feel a strong sense of powerless in my mind.
the feeling resulting from i always can`t live up to my expectation.
everytime i make up my mind to do something , i usually fail or
do not finish it perfectly.
so i am in blue mood and feel very sad in the park.
i am lonely , sat over grasslands beside the man-made lake.
i wanted to jump in the lake ,though the lake is not killing.
haunting by such a sad atmosphere,i don`t know what to do .
i don`t want to exercise today.
but lately,i saw a group of kids running happily in front of me.
they running,they laughing.
they leted me feel a strong vitality of life.
so i tried to smile and stand up.
started to run around the park as i usually do.
as i ran,my mood become clear and i know that i will keep running
running for myself .
they were running and laughing.
- LindaLv 61 0 年前最佳解答
1. Use past tense
2. When you organize your sentences, always use the simple sentence to start with. Also, always put S.+V. +O. + time / place. The way you write is very Chinese English.
3. Try to read some story books, even the books for kids. They will show you how to write the past tense, and how to apply the writing skills to connect everything you want to express.
4. Next time, pick up one topic for one paragraph. By doing so, we will be abl to correct your work better, and your article will be more organized. As a result, you will learn more.參考資料： myself
- 匿名使用者1 0 年前
基本上文法~滿多錯ㄉㄟ!有些不太懂你要表達什ㄇ~有點難改!!第一句弄得太複雜但又錯!你可以說I went exercised in the park as usaul.
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