請大大幫我看一下文法是不是有寫錯

Question

This is my first time for mountain climbing.
Oooh! What a exciting day!
Our goal is the Li Ding mountain.
Start off about 7 am.
(Hey!I wake up at 5:30! the sun not even rise.)
We take the Jain Li line and down to the Li Ding mountain.
Carzy line!
Hey! This is my first day! I'm a freshman!
I`m wondering why I accept the most tough line!?
The gradient is about 45 degree. Up and Down!
I`m wear a flat-soled shoe! Silly boy.
The dew make the road slippery.
Well! I`m gather 5 slip and fall.
It can make a qualification to exchange a jelly.

匿名使用者 · Accepted Answer

*Today would be* my first time *to do* mountain climing.
Ooh! What *an* exciting day!
Our goal today was *to clime* the Li Ding mountain.
*It started* off about 7 am.
(Hey! I *woke* up at 5:30! *Before the sun rose*.)
We *took* the Jain Li line and down to the Li Ding mountain.
*It was a* carzy line!
Hey! *Today was just* my first day! I *was like* a freshman!
I`m wondering why I *would* accept the *toughest* line!?
The gradient is about 45 degree. Up and Down!
I *was wearing* a *pair of* flat-soled *shoes*! Silly.
The dew *had made* the road slippery.
Well! I *would* gather 5 slip and fall.
It *could* make a *certificate for exchanging* a jelly.

匿名使用者 · Answer

This is my first time for mountain climbing. ==> was
Oooh! What a exciting day! ==> an
Our goal is the Li Ding mountain. ==> was
Start off about 7 am.==> started
(Hey!I wake up at 5:30! the sun not even rise.)==> woke up, the sun 'was'
We take the Jain Li line and down to the Li Ding mountain.==> took
Carzy line!
Hey! This is my first day! I'm a freshman!
I`m wondering why I accept the most tough line!?
The gradient is about 45 degree. Up and Down!
I`m wear a flat-soled shoe! Silly boy.
The dew make the road slippery.
Well! I`m gather 5 slip and fall.
It can make a qualification to exchange a jelly.

==> 動詞應該是 past tense

請大大幫我看一下文法是不是有寫錯

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