請幫我修改一下這篇英文

這是我的英文自傳...但是我覺得好像有點鬆散...想請英文利害的人幫我修改一下..或者能更活潑點...長度大概就是A4紙的半張再少一點...謝謝大家囉

I am a very easy person to get along, so I have many friends. Some friends think I am a good listener and they think I can always give them good suggestions or advices. Most of the seniorities think I am a polite person.

After graduate from Chung-Yu Junior College, I continually study in Nanya Institute of Technology. My major is Applied Foreign Languages. Subjects including English writing, English reading, English speech and presentation, Spanish, Japanese, Toeic, journalistic English and so on. In addition to school subjects, I specially like to reading. And I also learned some skills that I interested in. For example, I enter the financial class of Money DJ in this winter vacation.

My interests are listening music, reading and tasting different kind of foods. Taste food makes me feel happy and it is also a channel to release my pressure.

I would be very grateful if I have this opportunity to work at your company. I am very willing to take challenges and I don’t fear of hard working. Hope you could give me a chance to present myself. Thank you so much.

已更新項目:

easy person 不是指很容易相處的意思嗎??? 就像 get along with 這種用法一樣??

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  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前
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    I am a very easy person to get along.~~改成I am a companionable person. companionable~~好交往的;友善的

    they think I can always give them good suggestions or advices.~~改成they think I may give them good suggestions or advices.

    After graduate from Chung-Yu Junior College, I continually study in Nanya Institute of Technology. ~~改成After I graduated from Chung-Yu Junior College會比較好...

    "My major is Applied Foreign .Subjects including English writing, English reading, English speech and presentation, Spanish, Japanese, Toeic, journalistic English and so on." ~~改成My major subject is Applied Foreign Languages, including English writing, English reading, English speech and presentation, Spanish, Japanese, Toeic, journalistic English and so on.

    I specially like to reading. ~~改成I specially to like reading. *to後面要保持原形唷!!

    And I also learned some skills that I interested in. ~~改成And I also learn some skills that I am interested in.

    I enter the financial class of Money DJ in this winter vacation.~~改成I attended/joined class of Money DJ in this winter vacation.

    My interests are listening music, reading and tasting different kind of foods. ~~你可以換成 In my free time, I like listening music, reading and tasting different kinds of foods.

    Taste food makes me feel happy and it is also a channel to release my pressure.~~ Tasting kinds of foods let me felt happy.

    大概是這樣子吧!!

    參考資料: 自己~~
  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前

    你是要說容易相處吧!!是easy-going or easy to get along with

  • 1 0 年前

    這是我自己修改的~

    你可以參考看看喔

    並沒有全部改掉

    只改掉一些比較我覺得不太順的地方

    I'm an easygoing person. Because of this, I have a lot of friends and get along with them very well. Some of my friends think that I am a good listener. Moreover, I can always give them good suggestions. Besides, the elders think that I am a polite person.

    After I graduated from Chung-Yu Junior College, I continually study in Nanya Institute of Technology. I major in Applied Foreign Languages. The Subjects I have to study including English writing, English reading, English speech and presentation, Spanish, Japanese, Toeic, journalistic English and so on. In addition to school subjects, I prefer to read. Besides,I also learned some skills that I interested in. For example, I entered the financial class of Money DJ in this winter vacation.

    My hobbies are listening music, reading and tasting different kind of foods. Tasting food makes me feel happy.It is a way to release my pressure.

    I would be very grateful if I had this opportunity to work at your company. I am very willing to take challenges and I don’t fear of hard working. Hope you could give me a chance to present myself. Thank you so much.

  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前

    I am a very easy person to get along, so I have many friends. 這句是說:我是一個很閒散的人 所以有很多朋友形容詞用得怪怪的~!!easy [基本字彙]<<形容詞>>(easier, easiest)1 輕易的; 簡單的, 沒有困難的2 輕鬆的; 隨便的3 (態度) 鬆散的4容易被利用的, 容易受騙的這就比較有明褒暗貶的意思:表面上好相處、其實是因為容易被利用的如果接妳以下的句子 我覺得用〝聰明〞- intelligent 這個形容詞會更好!!in.tel.li.gent [次常用字]1 有智慧的2 聰慧的3 理智的  an intelligent decision 明智的決定  an intelligent solution to the budget problem 對預算問題睿智的解決辦  法4 知性的I am a very intelligent person to get along, so I have many friends. , I continually study in Nanya Institute of Technology繼續唸某個學校 在這裡接continually在主格後面也不好~!!My major is Applied Foreign Languages. 我主修+某科用 I  major  in + 某科  比較好 - -知識+家族 歡迎加入討論!!! ╠。☆ ★。知。識。╬㊣╭☆。 ★。 ╣ http://tw.club.yahoo.com/clubs/I_w_a_n_t_to_k_n_o_...

    2005-11-20 10:26:00 補充:

    作文的開頭第1句很重要!!!

    所以用字更要注意一點~!!

    2005-11-20 10:34:28 補充:

    尤其這篇好像是要應徵工作的自傳

    要儘量表現出自己很有自信

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