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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

緊急!!緊急!!這篇文章有啥文法錯誤嗎?

Why Mary failed in the chemistry

There were some reasons that Mary failed in the chemistry. First of all, she often slept or talked when professor was teaching on the platform. And, even if she didn’t sleep or talk, she usually didn’t be very concentrate in the class. Second, she was always absent without leave for the class such as she was playing the game on the Internet at her dormitory. Moreover, she didn’t prepare enough for her midterm exam, so she failed it in the midterm. Also, she didn’t hand in the most important report before the end of the semester, so that she had no chance to retrieve her midterm score. Most important of all, she didn’t do the final experiment in the class, so she got zero on her final exam.

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麻煩各位大大仔細幫我找唷~

例如開頭的句子O不OK~

然後conclusion sentence可不可以~!!

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  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    Why Mary Failed in the Chemistry?

    There were some reasons that Mary failed in the chemistry. First of all, she often sleeps or talks when the professor was teaching on the platform. Plus, even if she did not sleep or talk, she usually does not pay attention in the class. Secondly, she always absent without a good reason such as playing game on the Internet at her dormitory. Moreover, she did not prepare enough for her midterm exam, so she failed it. In addition, she did not hand in the most important report before the end of the semester, so that she had no chance to retrieve her midterm grade. Most important of all, she did not do the final experiment in the class, so she got zero on her final exam.

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    Why Mary failed in the chemistry---題目重要詞的第一個字母要大寫

    And, even if she didn’t sleep or talk, ---句子的開頭,最好別用and

    didn't----在短文裏,不要用“don't”該用“do not”

    she was always absent without leave for the class such as she was playing the game on the Internet at her dormitory.---不要在從复she was playing

    play game---不用the在中間

    her midterm score----通常都是用 her midterm grade

    參考資料: myself
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  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前

    看第一句就知道

    只有 yumi_huang 改對了

    其它幾位就別看了

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  • 1 0 年前

    嗯。。。我直接把該更正的用全部大寫:

    Why Mary failed Chemistry

    (如果把Chemistry當成一門課的話,就不需要in the,並Chemistry要大寫)

    There were MANY reasons that Mary failed Chemistry. First of all, she often slept or talked when THE professor(一般在特定人選前都會加the) was teaching on the platform. (開頭不應該用and)Even if she WASN'T SLEEPING or TALKING(因爲是持續性的動作,用過去進行式會好一點 :p), she usually WASN'T(didn't be 的文法是不對的) very CONCENTRATED(這裡加ed,變成形容詞) in the class. SECONDLY, she was always absent without LEAVES(口語一點,可以用 cutting class,翹課) for simple reasons such as PLAYING INTERNET GAMES at her dormitory.(這句話怪怪的,這樣比較好聽 :p). Moreover, she didn't prepare enough for her midterm exam WHICH CAUSED HER TO FAIL HER MIDTERM(這樣文法通通一點,意思,因爲她沒準備好,使她自己fail了那個考試). She didn't EVEN(捨棄also,換even,不然會有2個逗號在一個句子裏) hand in the most important report before the end of the semester, so that she had no chance to retrive her midterm score. Most important of all, SHE GOT ZERO ON HER FINAL EXAM BECAUSE SHE DIDNT DO THE FINAL EXPERIMENT IN THE CLASS(調換句子,用because連接)。

    再寫一次:

    Why Mary failed Chemistry

    There were MANY reasons that Mary failed Chemistry. First of all, she often slept or talked when THE professor was teaching on the platform. Even if she WASN'T SLEEPING or TALKING, she usually WASN'T CONCENTRATED in the class. SECONDLY, she was always CUTTING CLASSES for simple reasons such as PLAYING INTERNET GAMES at her dormitory. Moreover, she didn't prepare enough for her midterm exam WHICH CAUSED HER TO FAIL HER MIDTERM. She didn't EVEN hand in the most important report before the end of the semester, so that she had no chance to retrive her midterm score. Most important of all, SHE GOT ZERO ON HER FINAL EXAM BECAUSE SHE DIDNT DO THE FINAL EXPERIMENT IN THE CLASS.

    參考資料: ME
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  • 瀟灑
    Lv 6
    1 0 年前

    修改如下,請參考There wereseveral reasons that Mary failed in the chemistry. Firstly, she always slept or talked with others when professor was teaching in class. And, even if she didn’t sleep or talk, she usually didn’t concentrate at all in the class. Secondly, she was always absent without leaving of absence such as she was playing the game on the Internet at the dormitory. Moreover, she didn’t prepare the midterm exam enough, so she failed in the midterm examination . She didn’t hand in the most important report before the end of the semester either, therefore she had no chance to retrieve her midterm score. Most important of all, she didn’t finish the final experiment in the class, so she got zero on the final exam.

    參考資料: I myself
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