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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 2 0 年前

幫我修改英文作文(20點)

Paying attention is very important.

In class, we should pay attention when teacher is teaching. It's very difficult, but it helps us to get more knowledge and learn other important things. Also, we don't need to spend so much time to review all the things back at home. Our life will have fun, too.

We will absorb important knowledges beyond text books, like how to handle problems, how to learn new things, how to enjoy oneself and how to help people, etc. When we have more knowledges than others, our score will become better than others, too. Then, other people will proud of us.

If we all pay attention in every class, we don't need to waste the time. We we can learn things in class immediately and efficientcy. It will help us to remember the things on books. We won't forget things so easily, too. It is a good way to learn.

It helps our life to be interesting because we will have more knowledge. When we are chating, our dialogs is going to be more interesting. Everything will be better. Teachers will be proud of us and other students will envy our knowledge, too.

We should pay attention when we're doing everything. If we pay attention in class, we will be a better student. The score will be advanced and improved. Our teacher will have a good impressions of us. So, paying attention is very important in doing everything.

請英文好的大大,

幫我改一下文法…

謝謝!

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  • 匿名使用者
    2 0 年前
    最佳解答

    * 太多it了, 想辦法改成其他的用詞

    * 第二段和最後一段寫得比較好, 其他幾段好像是一直再重複同樣的想法

    * 因為太多重複的用詞, 所以幫你加了些新字

    * 為尊重作者, 我就不改太多啦

    Paying attention is very important.

    In class, we should pay attention TO WHAT teacherS ARE teaching.

    It SEEMS very difficult but helps us to get more knowledge and learn other important things.

    Also, we don't need to spend so much time reviewING all the things WHEN WE GET back home. Our life CAN BE fun, too.

    We will absorb ABUNDANT knowledges beyond text books, like how to handle problems, how to learn new things, how to enjoy oneself and how to help people, etc. When we have more knowledges than others, our score will become better than others, too.

    (建議改成 The more knowledge we have, the better scores we will get, 就不用跟其它人比較啦)

    Then, other people will BE proud of us.

    (建議改成 We can take pride in ourselves. 因為後面有段話又有類似的句子)

    If we all pay MUCH MORE attention in every class, we don't need to waste TOO MUCH time CATCHING UP THE CLASS. We can learn things in class immediately and efficientLy. PAYING MORE ATTENTION AT CLASS will help us rememberING THE IMPORTANT NOTES IN THE TEXT books. We won't EASILY forget WHAT WE HAVE LEARNED.

    It is a good way to learn.

    (建議改成 Does that sound wonderful?)

    It helps our life to be MORE interesting IF we have more knowledge. When we are chatTing, our dialogs ARE GETTING more interesting AND OUR COMMUNICATION SKILLS will be better IMPROVED. Teachers will be proud of us and other students will envy OF THE RICHNESS OF our knowledge, too.

    We should pay attention TO EVERYTHING THAT we do.

    If we pay MORE attention in class (比較句), we will be a better student (所以後面也是比較句).

    OUR scoreS will be advanced and improved. Our teacher will have a good impressions of us. So, paying attention is very important in doing ANYthing.

    參考資料: WAH
  • 宥慈
    Lv 5
    2 0 年前

    Paying attention is very important.

    In class, we should pay attention when teacher is teaching. It's very difficult, but it helps us to get more knowledge and learn other important things. Also, we don't need to spend too much time to review all the things after class. There for, we can do more things which we are interested in.

    We will absorb important knowledges beyond text books, like how to handle problems, how to learn new things, how to enjoy oneself and how to help people... etc. If we have more knowledges than others, our score will be better than others, too. Then, other people will be proud of us.

    If we always pay attention in every class, we don't need to waste time doing review. We we can learn things in class immediately and efficiently. It will help us to remember the things on books. We won't forget things so easily, too. It is a good way to learn.

    Our life will be more full filled because of having more knowledge. When we are chating, our dialogs will to be more interesting. Teachers will be proud of us and other students will envy because we know so much things, too.

    We should pay attention when we're doing everything. If we pay attention in class, we will be a better student. The score will be advanced and improved. Our teacher will have a good impressions of us. So, paying attention is very important in doing everything.

    我用複製幫你把原文不對或文意不順的地方修改過~但是我還是希望你能重寫這篇文章~專心的好處有很多~不要一直把注意力集中在課堂上~可以多舉些例子~譬如你文章中提到~很多事情都需要專心去做~甚至連玩遊戲都可以拿來寫~

    強烈建議你重寫這篇文章~

    2005-12-02 21:42:38 補充:

    都是他害的~你是用翻譯軟體嗎?

    參考資料: 自己
  • 匿名使用者
    2 0 年前

    是注意的是非常重要的。 在課,當教師教時,我們應該注意。他會許很難,但是它幫助我們得到更多的知識並且研究其他重要的事情。 另外,事情只不過是次的,我們不需要過度的在家背。 我們的生活也是有趣的。 我們將在教科書以外的地方吸收重要的知識,怎樣研究新事情,怎樣玩得愉快與一起怎麼樣幫助人等…,我們將變得最好。更多知識等我們和其他哪些人。如果我們在每個班級全部都內支付的通知,我們不需要消磨時間。 立即在課的事情和efficientcy我們能研究我們。

    2005-12-02 21:17:34 補充:

    秘書將幫助我們並且得到這件東西。 我們將不如此和容易忘記事情。 學習是一種好辦法。 它讓我們的生活是有趣的,因為我們將有更多更多的知識。 當我們聊天時,我們的對話將會更有趣。 一切事情將更安好。 教師將為我們感到驕傲,其他學生將會嫉妒我們的知識。 當我們做一切事情時,我們應該注意。 如果我們在課注意,我們將是一個好的學生。 贏得將發展,改進。 我們的教師將在我們身上有一種友好的印象。像這樣子,注意的在做一切的過程中非常重要。

    2005-12-02 21:19:12 補充:

    以上是翻譯過後本人在修改的

    亦下士修蓋後的英文

    2005-12-02 21:20:02 補充:

    What Paying attention is paid attention to is very important. In the lesson, when the teacher teaches, we should notice . He will let to be very difficult, but it helps us to receive more knowledge and other important things of research. In addition, the thing is nothing but time,

    2005-12-02 21:20:33 補充:

    we do not need excessive carrying at home . Our life is interesting too. We will absorb important knowledge outside textbook, how study new thing, how have a good time with how about help people wait for ! -,We will make it best. More knowledge who does it wait for we and not other.

    2005-12-02 21:21:06 補充:

    If the notice which we all paid in each class, we do not need to pass the time . We can study us in thing and efficientcy in the lesson immediately.

    2005-12-02 21:21:19 補充:

    The secretary will help us and get this thing. We will not be so and apt to forget the thing . It is a kind of good method to study. It let life of us interesting, because we have more more knowledge. When we chat,

    2005-12-02 21:21:31 補充:

    our dialogue will be more interesting. Everything will be better and more sound . The teacher will be proud of us , other students will envy our knowledge. When we do everything, we should notice . If we notice in the lesson , we will be a good student. Gain and develop,

    2005-12-02 21:21:44 補充:

    improve. Our teacher will have a kind of friendly impression on us. The picture is in this way, the ones that paid attention to are very important in the which make all course.

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