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When I went to guitar club.

I saw THE DOG!!

Who was make me fall down form my motorbike.

He was taking a walk and looked comfortable.

Maybe I should stop the motorbike and give him a lesson.

(m:Then you would be kidnap to space.)

Oooh I almost forget he is a alien-dog.

When I finished the guitar club.

On the way home.I saw a red light on the sky.

GOD!!Is that an UFO!?

Waoo! Finally I saw an UFO too!!

The red light was so high on the sky.

It can`t be a lighthouse or some building.

And it`s bright red! There is no star like that!

It flyed soft and slow.

I stop the motorbike and watched it.

sometimes bright and sometimes disappear.

I wondered why my camera was not with me now.

Suddenly!There was a voice came form my heart.

(m:Is that a Tan Dan?)

Damn! It was!

And I saw the red light float down slowly.

When I was leaving the school.

I saw a crowd of students playing the Tan Dan.

With a loud rock music and shake of the head.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    When I went to the guitar club, I saw a dog, which made me fall down form my motorbike. He was taking a walk and looking comfortable. (ok this doesn’t make any sense taking a walk and looking comfortable? What r u trying to say?)

    Maybe I should have stopped the motorbike and given him a lesson. (it’s not logical how’s this work to give him a lesion if u stopped the bike )

    (m:Then you would be kidnap to space.) (don’t understand ur point)

    Oh I almost forgot he was an alien-dog. (alien dog??)

    On the way home, after I got out the guitar club, I saw a red light on the sky.

    ”Oh my GOD!!Is that an UFO?” I claimed. Finally I saw an UFO!

    Since the red light was so high on the sky, it couldn’t be on the top of a lighthouse or a building.

    It was bright red ;however, non of stars are like that.

    It flew softly and slowly.

    I stopped the motorbike and watched it.

    It sometimes shined and sometimes disappeared.

    I wondered why my camera was not with me.

    Suddenly, there was a voice came from my heart “Is that a Tan Dan?”

    And I saw the red light started floating down slowly.

    When I was leaving the school, (I thought r were already on ur way home. U said u left the club on ur way home?) I saw a crowed of students playing the Tan Dan with a loud rock music and shaking their heads.

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  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前

    When I went to a guitar club,

    I saw THE DOG!!

    Who made me fall down from my motor bike.

    He was taking a walk and looked comfortable.

    Maybe I should’ve stopped the motorbike and gave him a lesson.

    (m:Then you would be kidnapped to outer space.)

    Oooh I almost forgot he was an alien-dog.

    When I left the guitar club.

    On the way home I saw a red light on the sky.

    GOD!!Is that a UFO!?

    Waoo! Finally I saw a UFO too!!

    The red light was so high on the sky.

    It can`t be a lighthouse or some kind of a building.

    And it was bright red! There is no star like that!

    It flied softly and slow.

    I stopped the motorbike and watched it.

    It sometimes flashed and sometimes disappeared.

    I wondered why my camera was not with me then.

    Suddenly there was a voice coming from my heart.

    (m:Is that a Tan Dan?)

    Damn! It was!

    And I saw the red light floating down slowly.

    When I was leaving the school.

    I saw a crowd of students playing the Tan Dan.

    With a loud rock music and shake of the head.

    我有改了一些字如果不喜歡就把它改掉吧

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