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Weight Loss

Reducing weight is very popular among not only young girls but also boys and old people. Most of them do it for two reasons. One is for their health, and the other is for good shapes. In order to lose weight, the following are two methods which are both suitable for you to try.

Certainly exercise is essential. Exercise helps metabolism. Exercise helps the functions of heart and lungs. Exercise every day and more than thirty minutes once. By doing it regularly, having a healthy body is not a dream.

The other way is to eat low-fat food, more fruits and vegetables. Low-fat food have less calories than high-fat one. The more high-fat food you eat, the more calories you will get. Furthermore, you should keep it every day or the diet won't work. You have to change your dietary havits. You must be a dietarian.

Losing weight is not easy but not that hard as people think. The two methods above are really healthful ways though you won't see the results in a short time. Follow the rules. Go and keep it. Hopefully you can lose your weight!

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    Exercise every day and more than thirty minutes once. By doing it regularly, having a healthy body is not a dream.

    Exercise every day and more than thirty minutes once這句有中翻英的感覺,最好不要這樣寫,雖然閱卷老師知道你的意思. 我覺得這兩句不太順, 寫作要簡單扼要

    我寫一下我的想法.

    *By doing exercise over thirty minutes regularly, having a healthy body is not a dream

    no more.

    Furthermore, you should keep it every day or the diet won't work. You have to change your dietary havits. You must be a dietarian.

    跟你說, 寫英做, 最好不要有短句, 像You have to change your dietary havits. You must be a dietarian. 可以用在一般的聊天 但是寫英做 老外會認為你未完成你要表達的, 雖然文法沒錯.像你you用了兩次 這樣不好,最好是不要重複啦 以前我寫英做的時候 我就一直 "I....., I....." ,就被糾正很多次. 我小改一下 你參考看看

    *Furthermore, you should keep it every day or the diet won't work. Being a dietarian might be a effective way to get rid of your bad dietary habits.

    Losing weight is not easy but not that hard as people think.

    如果是我我會這樣寫啦...你寫的也對

    *Losing weight is not as hard as people think, though it is not easy.

    The two methods above are really healthful ways though you won't see the results in a short time. Follow the rules. Go and keep it. Hopefully you can lose your weight!

    加個mentioned會比較好 因為你在上一段有提及過減重的方法. "Follow the rules. Go and keep it." 有點口語, 最好不要這樣寫. 我寫一下我的想法.

    *The two methods mentioned above are really healthful ways though you won't see the results in a short time. May you follow the rules and keep it. Hopefully, you are certain of losing weight!

    然後我要恭喜你 你寫的出這樣的文章 你的作文分數會很高

    你的程度在高中生算很強的 繼續加油!

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