可以幫我修改一下文章嗎 ? 很急~~
I entered 淡江 college school for a long time , let me deeply feel senior high school and college school are different from some things like :
First , I have to get accommodation. Second , there are so many activities in school is so exciting. Third , both teacher and student active mode at class.
Because I lived at home before , I don’t understand dormitory life , it’part of making me feel fascinating in my college life.
When I lived with roommates for few months , I found us just like family , even when we sick , low temper , bad grades , homework problems , we can change answers each other and solve them.
Dormitory life is perfect !
- 匿名使用者1 0 年前最佳解答
I have been a college student with Tamkang University for a while. (long time 太誇張了吧)
As for me, there are certain types of things in college, which are quite different from high school, such as:
Since the location of the college is far from home, I had to get an accommodation near the campus. (這句跟前句無關ㄟ)
Besides, many of activities at college are so exciting to me. (你又沒說什麼活動很exciting, 這句很不清楚, 也是跟前句無關)
Furthermore, teachers and students interact with one another at class in college. As in high school, we had to keep quiet, in order to pay close attention to what teachers told us. (既然要跟high school比較, 我後面就多加了一句, 以作為比較嘛, 要不然也是無關的例句)
I used to live at home, therefore I was not able to imagine what a dormitory life would be like.
However, being able to live in a dormitory is a fascinating part of my college life.
After months of getting along with my roommates, my roommates and I have become more or less like a family.
We could talk about anything. We share feelings as being ill, being in bad mood, having bad grades, having problems in homework. (雜七雜八都寫了, 在我看來都是差不多的東西, 感覺就是你在湊字數)
We even share food, and solve problems for one another.
My dormitory life has been a great experience to me.
1. 每個句子都嫌太長了, 所以我故意把它們截斷
2. 每一句都很難翻, 是因為你嘗試用一句話來表達太多的情感, 而每一個情感過於輕描, 且點到為止, 所以文章發揮度不大
3. 最後一段的每一句都可能是文章最後一句, 想必是你嘗試湊東湊西的結果參考資料： wah
- 1 0 年前
It's makes me change a lot when I entered to淡江 college school. I extremely realized that college life are really different from senior high school, for example, it's too far away to live at home and it's also very interesting in interaction between teachers and students. Many of activities are fresh and excting for me. It's hard to imagine the life in dormitory. I can not talk with my mom and I can not just go around all the place. Everything has new rules in th dormitory. Although I am not used it very well, I still get along with my roommates. We share things with each other very often no matter bad things or good things. We also encourage each other,too. We are just like family. Dormitory is given so many beautiful things to me. How wonderful life it is!!