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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

【急】拜託英文厲害的幫忙看一下!(勿用翻譯軟體)

 麻煩英文厲害的人,幫忙我看一下我的英文自傳有沒有哪邊錯誤?

*勿用翻譯軟體來翻譯!謝謝!

 拜託了 ><

In my elementary school,Iquite liked activities of art;therefore,I joined club of POP,

it enlightened more my interest that designed poster.

 

During junior high school,I met a teacher who let my life teansfer,she required that our lessons had to very perfect,not only paid attention to lessons but also try my best on the contest. She hope that we have the sence of responsibility and honer,then I can try hard to do anything and be a successful person. And I met a opportunity by accident,I joined choral society in school,it let me learn many chorus of 奧妙.(奧妙的英文不會)

My grades were not too poor because teacher supervised my lessons;thus,I culturated good hibit of study,she let me realized that studied is not for something,in order to increase my knowledge and mind.

I entered Paul Hsu comprehensive high school,because of interest, I choose social studies program. When I was a freshman,I majored daily America English that was interesting me,I wanted to increase my english of ability,becaus todays English is international lanuage,it was important for us. When I was junior grade,I got GEPT of elementary propitiously,I will get GEPT of intermediate hard to prove my ability.

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這個是我英文自傳的一部分而已,並不是全部!OK?

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    In my elementary school,I quite liked activities of art;therefore,I joined the club of POP, and the club enlightened my interest in designing posters.

     

    During my junior high school,I met a teacher who changed my life. She required that we had not only to pay attention to lessons but also to try our best on the contest. She hoped that we should have the concept of responsibility and honor,so we can try hard to do anything and be successful people. Then, I met a opportunity by accident that I joined choral club in school, which let me learn the profound meaning of chorus. What's more,

    my grades were not too bad because my teacher supervised my lessons;thus,I formed a good habit of study,and she let me realiz that study is not for something(be specific!),but increase my knowledge and broaden my mind.

    After that,I entered Paul Hsu comprehensive high school. Because of interest, I choose social studies program. When I was a freshman,I majored in daily America English that interested me. Besides,I wanted to increase my English ability, because nowadays English is an international lanuage which is important for us. When I was in junior ,I got GEPT of elementary propitiously, and I will work hard to improve my ability by getting GEPT of intermediate.

    我在很多地方幫你做了修改,不知道會不會背離原意就是了!

    你相當要注意的是句子的聯接,一個句子只能有一個動詞而已唷!希望可以符合你的需求(我改了很久啊!)

    參考資料: By myself
  • 5 年前

    學任何語言不外乎就是要有恆心跟毅力

    我覺得白天有工作的上班族特別適合線上學習英文

    才不用下了班就急急忙忙趕著去補習班上課

    光來回車程就省了1~2個小時,省下的時間可以多背好幾個單字

    也可以輕鬆在家線上學英文,想學好英文的人這是一個很不錯的機會

    用正確的方法一次把英文學起來!!

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  • 1 0 年前

    看來看去每個解答都還是中式英文阿!因為這位發問的小孩在撰寫文章時,壓根就沒有從英文邏輯思考,不過寫出來很棒了,建議應該多閱讀,第一段應該要改為總括概述,之後各段落再舉例說明,最後總結論點。這是一般英文寫作的模式!!

  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前

    When learning in elementary school, I was fond of art. So I joined a POP art club, and was interesting of poster design.

    Time was fly. I was growing, and entered in junior high school. I had a teacher who had changed my viewpoint of life. She asked us to study hard in school, and told us should pay attention to the lessons and also need to develop hard-fought spirits. She taught us how to be an honest and responsible person, So that Might deal with the troubles we met in future and become successful. For this, I had joined a choral society in school by chance. It's marvelous to be one member of choral society.

    I was a good student, for she was my teacher. I was diligent. I was awared of to go to school was not for my parents, but increasing my knowledge and forming personal character.

    Now I study in Paul Hsu comprehensive high school, I like this school. I major in social studing program. When I was a freshman here, I read daily America English which I found very useful. Becaus nowadays English is an international tool of communication, it is so important that I need to improve my ability of spoken English . Now I am a junior. Fortunately I passed GEPT of elementary grade. I plan to get GEPT of intermediate grade, I should pay hard working on it.

    同學,你的文法不好,及中文式表達情況嚴重。

    線上英文學習,我的MSN是:onebyone_online_service@hotmail.com

    參考資料: www.onebyone-online.com
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  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前

    小學有點太簡略ㄌ....而且.....自我介紹也沒有...這樣....想拿高分..不怎麼簡單(

    參考資料: 自ㄐ
  • 你先把該空格ㄉ地方用好~

    不然~我不知道你在寫啥~(我英文科ㄉ)

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