愛吃鬼 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 2 0 年前

幫幫我改成正確文法..

Stray dogs is a serious problem in Taiwan recently. We can see some sick dogs they stray everywhere. Although dogs are thought the loyalist friends for us,but we treat them in a cruel way.We should find a way to solve the problem at once. At first,we can prevent the female dogs to have babies.If we do it , we can reduce the total of stray dogs.Second,we have to take care of the dogs which we have. We can"t desert them casually when we don"t like them. At last, if we find the stray dogs , we should call the goverment to deal whit the problem. If we do so, we can make our environment more better.

這是一篇改錯的文章(完整未修改過的.)..我自己無法完全找出.考試用...請各位幫忙..謝謝..

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不好意思..因為蠻急的...麻煩各位了..^^..

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謝謝各位的幫忙^^..感激不盡..

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  • 匿名使用者
    2 0 年前
    最佳解答

    Come on... 這是 a recent problem? I bet's it's been like that for Centuries.

    Homeless dogs have presented a serious problem in Taiwan for ages. We can see some sick dogs straying everywhere. Although dogs are thought to be our loyal friends, we treat them in a cruel way. We should find a way to solve the problem at once. At first, we can prevent the female dogs from having puppies. If we do it, we can reduce the number of homeless dogs. Second, we have to take care of the dogs that we own. We can't abandon them when we no longer like them. At last, if we find any homeless dogs, we should call the goverment to deal with the problem. If we do so, we can make our environment better.

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    很像我小學的時候常寫的怪怪東西...

    Well... it's organized, but very wordy. The expressions are not good at all.

    When writing something like this, it's best to appeal through pathos. You want to bond with the audience and gain their sympathy.

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    如果我來, 我會寫...

    Behind a layer of muddy coat and fierce barking lies a soul crying for help. The growing population of homeless dogs in Taiwan has become increasingly problematic. <Your topic sentence is then going to be something about resolving the homeless doggie problem. Make it pop out.> ................................................

  • helen
    Lv 7
    2 0 年前

    括弧內為需改正的部分

    Stray dogs (have been) a serious problem in Taiwan recently.

    We can see some sick dogs (straying) everywhere.

    Although dogs are thought (to be) the (most loyal) friends for us, (刪除but) we treat them in a cruel way.

    We should find a way (solving) the problem at once.

    (First),we can prevent the female dogs (from having) babies.

    If we do it , we can reduce the (number) of stray dogs.

    Second,we have to take care of the dogs which we (own).

    We can"t desert them (anytime) when we don"t like them.

    (Lastly), if we find (any) stray dogs , we should call the goverment to deal (with) the problem.

    If we do so, we can make our environment (much) better.

    參考資料: 幫你解題, 是考試用的嘛
  • 2 0 年前

    Stray dogs is a serious problem in Taiwan recently. We can see some sick dogs straying everywhere. Although dogs are thought as the loyalist friends to us, we treat them in a cruel way. We should find a way to solve the problem at once. At first, we can prevent female dogs from having babies. If we do so, we can reduce the number of stray dogs. Second, we have to take care of the dogs that we have. We can't desert them casually when we don"t like them. At last, if we find the stray dogs , we should call the goverment to deal with them. If we do so, we can make our environment much better.

  • 2 0 年前

    Stray dogs has become a serious problem in Taiwan recently. We can see some sick dogs stray everywhere on the street. Even though dogs are thought as the loyalist friends for people,but some people will abuse dogs for outlet or just for fun. We should find a way to solve the problem of stray dogs at once. At first, we have to take care of the dogs as long as we decide to raise them. We can't desert them casually when we don't like them. Secondly,we should prevent the female dogs to have babies. If we do it , we can reduce some amount of stray dogs. At last, if we find the stray dogs , we should make a call to the goverment to deal with the dog's problem. Stray dogs would not become a serious problem if people keep them as a member of family.

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    (If we do so, we can make our environment more better.=>Isn't it soo selfish?)

    參考資料: Me
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