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English Composition

Is there something wrong with my English Composition ?

Please provide your opinions. Thanks a lot.

My campus life

Since I attended senior high school, my campus life has a great change. Apart from the schoolwork, I can take part in various kinds of extracurricular activities.

There are many sorts of activities in my school, such as annual celebration of school, campus sports competition, Christmas party, and so on. Our school authorities expect that we not only have good grades but can cultivate good hobbies.

Of all the activities, school annual celebration gave me strong impression. On that day, our class provided drinks, foods and games for the coming guests. We worked hard and cooperated smoothly to earn much money for our class. After that, we went to dinner to celebrate our success.

Concerning about curriculum, our geography teacher required us to finish five trails of mountain hiking near Taipei. Hiking is one of my favorite sports so I finished eleven routes of hiking trails. In my memory, while hiking in the Guizikeng trail, I went through the lush trees, seeing various kinds of flowers, hearing the chirping of birds and the murmuring of the brook. When I reached the pagoda, there was a spectacular view of Peitou County.

As for my classmates, I want to appreciate to them. We had done many reports all together. They have been my support and a constant source of joy. I did make many friends this semester.

Fortunately, I also met good teachers .They helped me in the curriculum so that I could win the third place of my school in the first semester. Here I also gave my deep appreciation to them.

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我是想各位大大幫我挑錯誤的地方,不是翻成中文,謝謝

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  • 1 0 年前
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    我覺得你英文不錯 文法很好 只是有的地方覺得我會習慣這樣寫 比較口語吧 我再美國呆了三年 也上寫作課一段時間 會比較習慣通暢一點的

    給你參考喔 ps(單字)....換成

    {句子}....換成

    <省略不用> 希望你看的懂

    Composition(essay)

    Since I attended senior high school, my campus life has(has had) a great change{my campus life has been changed alot}. Apart from the schoolwork, I <can> take part in...

    There are many sorts of activities in my school, such as annual celebration <of school>, <campus> sports competition, Christmas party, and so on. Our school authorities expect that we not only have good grades but can(also) cultivate good hobbies.

    Of all the activities, school annual celebration gave me strong(the strongest) impression. On that day, our class provided drinks, foods and games for the coming guests. We worked hard and cooperated smoothly to earn much money for our class{Due to hard-working and smooth cooperation, our class earned a lot money). After that...

    Concerning about curriculum, our geography teacher required us to finish five trails of mountain hiking near Taipei{our teacher required us to complete five practices of hiking on the mountains near Taipei). Hiking is one of my favorite sports so I finished eleven routes of hiking trails(...so I had done 11 routes)......

    As for my classmates, I want to appreciate to them{I am grateful for them}. We had done many reports <all> together. They have been my support and <a> constant source of joy. I did make many friends this semester.

    Fortunately, I also met good teachers .They helped me in(with) the curriculum so that I could win the third place of my school in the first semester. Here I also gave my deep appreciation to them{Therefore I want to give them my best regards} .

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    1 0 年前

    有是某事錯誤以我的英國構成嗎? 請提供您的看法。感謝萬分。

    我的校園生活

    因為我上高中學校, 我的校園生活有巨大變動。除schoolwork 之外, 我能參與以各種各樣的種類課外活動。有許多類活動在我的學校, 譬如學校的每年慶祝, 校園體育競爭, 聖誕晚會, 等等。我們的校方期待, 我們不僅有好成績但可能培養好愛好。所有活動, 教育每年慶祝給了我深刻的印象。在那天, 我們的類為來臨客人提供了飲料、食物和比賽。我們艱苦服務和順利地合作得贏得金錢為我們的類。在那以後, 我們去晚餐慶祝我們的成功。有關課程, 我們的地理老師要求我們完成山五串足跡遠足在臺北附近。遠足是我喜愛的體育的當中一個因此我完成了遠足足跡十一條路線。在我的記憶, 當遠足在Guizikeng 足跡, 我審閱lush 樹, 看各種各樣的種類花, 聽見唧啾叫鳥和私語溪。當我到達了塔, 有Peitou 縣一個壯觀的看法。至於我的同學, 我想要讚賞對他們。我們一起做了許多報告全部。他們是我的支持和恆定的源泉的喜悅。我做了許多朋友這個學期。幸運地, 我並且遇見了They 幫助我在課程的好老師以便我能贏取我的學校第三個地方在第一學期。我並且這裡給了我深刻的欣賞他們。

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