菜英蚊 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

英文高手幫我改作文(150字)

我程度並不好,內容淺顯易懂

我們社會的問題?

Obviously,social problems has much to do with the development of a contry.

As we all know,enviromental polution is the most serious problem in Taiwan .

We\'re aware of polution concern to threaten us.Hence, we should be devoted to protecting our home. In me opinion, the best

ways are as follows.

First of all, we should travel by public transit as we could, and Mass

Rapid Transit is the best choice in Taipei. It\'s fast‧cheap and comfortable.

Moreover,recycling and trash classification is so easy for us. In recent year,

the goverment has some policy to be the criterion. Last but not least, we

have to economized on resources any time.

In conclusion, protecting environment is everyone\'s duty. I firmly believe

that as long as everyone do the best for this earth, we will be able to enjoy

new days in the near future.

希望給予批評指教!

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In me opinion, the best ways are as follows.

這句我排列有點小問題"第4行"

不好意思

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    Obviously,social problems has much to do with the development of a contry.

    *** Obviously, there are many social problems in Developing country. ***

    We're aware of polution concern to threaten us. Hence, we should be devoted to protecting our home. In me opinion, the best ways are as follows.

    *** We are aware of the pollutions that have been threatening us. *** (後面的句子,沒有錯。)

    First of all, we should travel by public transit as we could and Mass Rapid Transit is the best choice in Taipei. It's fast‧cheap and comfortable.

    *** First of all , we should travel by public transport as often we we could and the Subway system should be the best choice in Taipei, which with the advantage of being fast, cheap and comfortable.***

    Moreover, recycling and trash classification is so easy for us. In recent year, the goverment has some policy to be the criterion.

    *** Moreover, recycling and rubbish categorization should be part of everyday life. In recent year, the government has already set up certain standard for us to follow. ***

    Last but not least, we have to economize on resources any time.

    *** Last but not least, we have to economize our resources at all costs. ***

    In conclusion, protecting environment is everyone's duty. I firmly believe that as long as everyone do the best for this earth, we will be able to enjoy new days in the near future.

    *** I firmly belive that as long as everyone DOSE the best for the earth *** (其它的沒有錯)

    2006-03-02 07:58:40 補充:

    其實你的英文程度不錯,這篇英文小品,內容不錯,段落也清楚,只是句子的結構和英文的常用話比較不熟悉,這是難免的。多寫就是了。再來,寫作的時候,最好是全部寫出來,例 We're = We are. 這比較正式一些。字不用特別選難字,簡單明瞭就是。

    參考資料: 個人意見
  • 1 0 年前

    真的很感謝喔~

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