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小米 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

英文 幫我找出文法錯誤 很急

Dear Mr. Hector Bradley,

I am glad to get your complaining letter, and I am apologetic heartfelt that did not put the perfect service up for your wife and you when you were here.

Firstly, I am sorry there was a lot of noisy building work to bother yours breakfast time, but I hope you can understand that I had to repaired it that moment immediately. Because of the elevator was not satisfactory safety, we checked again and again for all the guests.

Secondly, the “luxurious pool” was expanded for two weeks, and it became bigger now. There are new sauna and new solarium. We hope we can provide more facilities for our best guests and they are all free, too. I really want you can enjoy them next time, so I offer some compensation for you. Your wife and you come to our hotel next time, and get the discount 50% off.

I hope we can service for you next time.

Wishes

只要揪出錯誤就好,不用翻譯!!!

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    Dear Mr. Hector Bradley,

    (Thank you for) your (complaint) letter, and I (apology) (sincerely) that (I) did not (provide) the perfect service (no "up") for your wife and you when you were here.

    Firstly, I am sorry there was a lot of (noise of the) building work (which) bother(ed) yours breakfast time, but I hope you (would比較委婉) understand that I had to (repair) it (at) that moment immediately. Because (no "of") the elevator was not (in) satisfactory safety, we checked again and again for all the (guests' safety concern).

    Secondly, the “luxurious pool” was expanded (我知道你的意思,但句子放在一起有點語意不清, 建議不要for two weeks), and it became bigger now. There are (new rooms for) sauna and solarium. We hope we can provide more facilities for our best guests and (those facilities,因為跟前面主詞不同你用they不知還以為你指人) are all free, too. I really (hope or wish or welcome) you (come and) enjoy them next time, (thus) I (would like to) offer some compensation for you. (When your) wife and you come to our hotel next time, (you will) get the discount 50% off.

    I hope we (will have chance to serve) you next time.

    (Best wishes or Best regards,)

    我儘量尊重你的本文 不去更動 提供你參考囉

    2006-03-14 03:22:02 補充:

    覺得錯誤不多 一點點而已只是不夠口語 不太順暢語言能溝通最重要 作者要求不要改作文 訂正就好老實說我也沒想跟作者比賽作文純幫忙 目的達到就好

    2006-03-14 03:23:37 補充:

    前面有些人幫你改寫的還不錯如果你不介意其實可以用ㄛ

    參考資料: myself
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  • 小米
    Lv 4
    1 0 年前

    感謝3位大大很用心幫我改^^

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  • 1 0 年前

    錯誤很多..一時間不知道怎麼改..

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  • c-
    Lv 7
    1 0 年前

    不敢說我寫的都對,只是提供你參考:

    Dear Mr. Bradley,

    Thank you for your letter. I am writing to offer you our most sincere apology regarding your last stay at the (hotel name).

    Firstly, I am sorry to hear that while staying with the (hotel name), your breakfast was interrupted by the noisy service work that was going on. I am sure you would agree with me that elevator safety is of uttermost importance, hence whenever there is a problem, we are forced to perform the service work immediately. Such was the case when you were staying with us, I apologize for any inconvenience it has caused.

    Secondly, our “luxurious pool” was undergoing a two-week major expansion, and it is now bigger and better. There are now a new sauna and a new solarium. We strive to do our best to provide more facilities for our guests free of charge.

    In hope to compensate you for any incovenience the (hotel name) may have caused you last time, and to have you staying with us again to experience our brand new facilities, we are offering you a discount of 50% for your next stay with us. We look forward to serving you again.

    Sincerely yours,

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  • 1 0 年前

    不太流暢哦! 參考我的版本… =)

    Dear Mr. Hector Bradley,

    Thank you for your complaining letter. I apologize for not being able to offer you and your wife the best service while you were here.

    First of all, I am sorry that your breakfast was disturbed due to the loud noise nearby. I just hope you understand that the repair work had to be done because it was an urgent matter. The elevator was out of order, so to ensure the safety of all our guests, we had to double check to make sure it’s running properly.

    Second of all, the “luxurious pool” has been expanded. It is now bigger along with new sauna and new solarium. The new facilities are accessible free of charge, and are exclusive for our best guests.

    I would like to offer you and your wife a 50% discount the next time you visit our hotel as a compensation. So, please stop by and enjoy the new amenities.

    I hope we can serve you better next time.

    Best wishes.

    2006-03-18 09:36:00 補充:

    我是候選編號 002可是我覺得候選編號 003寫的比較好

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  • 大至上都沒錯啊

    大至上都沒錯啊

    大至上都沒錯啊

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