幫我看看我自己寫的英文小品

Darkly moon, deep in the night

Fallen leaves beside the road

They are rise up and flutter when wind reach

Although I\'m not fierce expectation

still disappointment

However, I will be wait.

By wait, perhaps I can receive your response

大致上是如此~

請幫我看看有沒有很大的文法或慣用與等等的錯誤~

謝謝!!

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請大家幫我判斷到底該選誰比較好?

因為我採用的是"will"這個回答者

[他比較接近我的程度 :p]

但是"polly"的回答我也學到許多東西

so~拜託大家的抉擇了~~~

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    因為這是詩,無法用傳統英文文法改,但我還是試試看:

    Darkly moon, deep in the night

    Fallen leaves beside the road

    They rise up and flutter when wind reach

    Although I'm not in fierce expectation

    Nevertheless.... disappointment still looms

    However, I will still be waiting.

    By waiting, perhaps I can receive your response

    參考資料: 我自己
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  • 1 0 年前

    Dark moon, deeply at night lie

    Fallen leaves the road beside

    Which rise up and flutter when winds come

    I ain't fierce expectation though,

    Being disappointed is how I feel

    But, I shall be there,

    For by waiting, I, perhaps, can receive the reponse from you.

    英文詩喜歡用倒裝句構,

    另外,一些文法部分也需要做些修改。

    希望有幫助^_^

    參考資料: 自己
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