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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

英文自傳的修改~請英文好的人幫幫看!!!!

Autobiography

My name is xxx. I am nineteen years old. I was born in Taoyuan, Taiwan. I am generous and easy-going. I can also be funny sometimes. There are four people in my family. My father is an engineer by occupation, but he always to be away or to travel on official business. I have a really sweet family and I am very grateful for this. My parents put much emphasis on my education, interest and future advance, and inspire my action in learning language.

Now I study in Nanya Institute Technology, my major in English. Because there are many courses. I was elected to be a class guidance officer and hygiene officer. I was also take part in a drama contests than more once to be a player. I have certificates about Chinese-typing qualification/license and CPR and First Aid qualification/license.

In my five-year junior colleges life, it\'s neither long nor short but I felt enriched. Each semester have different course, let us to learn the ambit between senior high school and five-year junior colleges.

In the course of Nanya, I always think about my ambitions. Two things of them, which I special enjoy are cooking and drawing. When I do something I went to do, I will feel quiet in mind and peace in disposition. I like this sense, so I enjoy them. My career ambition is to become a successful designer and to be able to cooks well. Though I don’t have any correlative certificates, but I always have a lively fancy.

After graduating from Nanya Institute Technology, I went to learn more cogitation and color scheme. I never think of the future. It comes soon enough.

Confidence is the first step on the road to success, so I went to be a person who can be active as well as be quite. Hope I can improve my artistry

請幫我看看哪邊有文法錯誤,動詞名詞形容詞錯的,逗點符號擺錯,大小寫錯!!!!!

感恩!!!!

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不用翻譯...只是想確定文法那些有錯誤嗎?

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    第一段:

    *My name is xxx. I am nineteen years old and I was born in Taoyuan, Taiwan.

    *Generally, I am an easy-going person with a sense of humor. My friends like to hang out with me because I make them laugh all the time.

    *Among the family, my father is the one who inspires me the most. He is an engineer of ______(是什麼樣的工程師)and he always has to go on business trips. Even though he cannot spend much time with me, he shows how much he cares about me especailly on my education. My father not only encourages me into learning different languages, but also support me on the deciscions I make towards life.

    沒有要介紹全家人的話,"There are four people in my family"可省略.

    如果要特別介紹家裡的某位成員, 應該會描述出他與自己的互動與成長,否則沒有理由會在文章裡特別提及.

    第二段:

    *I am currently majoring in English at Nanya Institute Technology (School?)

    *I was elected to be a class guidance officer and a hygiene officer by my classmates. (或是schoolmates)to ________________(有什麼責任)

    *Besides studying hard, I like to participate in various activities. As a matter of fact, I have played the soul characters in many school dramas such as "______"(人名) in

    "____"(話劇名稱) and entered the drama contests many times.

    *In addition to that, I have obtained several certificates including Cerificates in Chinese typing, CPR and First Aid qualification/license, and etc.

    *

    如果直接說"我曾參加過多次的話劇比賽"感覺會有點突兀,如果在前面加上一句

    "除了念書, 我還喜歡參加各種不同的活動" 是不是感覺上會比較流暢呢?

    第三段感覺起來沒有什麼重點,建議刪除

    第四段:

    *I have been trying to figure out what my amibitions are by taking different courses in Nanya.

    *I found out that two things I enjoy the most are cooking and drawing.

    *I love the feeling to do something I am really intrested in and hopfully I will become a sucessful designer as well as a chief in the future. Although I do not have any related licenses yet, I will keep working hard to achieve the goal of my life.

    第五段我看不懂你要表達什麼. 你前一段才說想當設計師,下一段又說我從不想未來,在我看來有點矛盾

  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前

    Autobiography

    My name is xxx. I am nineteen years old. I was born in Tao Yuan, Taiwan. I am a generous, easy-going and humorous person. There are four people in my family. My father is an engineer who is always away on business trips. I have a sweet family and I am very grateful for this. My parents put much attention on my education, interests, future advancement, and inspired me with language learning.

    Now I am studying in Nanya Institute of Technology with major in English. There are many courses I have to finish in order to graduate. I was elected to be a class guidance officer and hygiene officer. I also participated as a player in drama contests for more than once. I have certificates of Chinese-typing, CPR and First Aid.

    In my five-year junior college lives, I never felt the time issues but I feel enriched. Through courses from each semester, it helped us understand learning scopes difference between senior high school and five-year junior colleges.

    During the courses in Nanya, I always think about my future ambition. I especially enjoy cooking and drawing. When I do something I want to do, I feel quiet in mind and peace in disposition. I like this kind of feeling and I enjoy them very much. My career ambition is to become a successful designer and be able to cooks well. Even though I don't have any correlative certificates, but I always have a dream about it.

    After graduating from Nanya Institute of Technology, I want to learn more about design and color scheme. I never thought the future would come so soon. Confidence is my first step to the road of success, so I want to be a person who can be active as well as be quite. Hope I can improve my artistic skills.

  • Danny
    Lv 7
    1 0 年前

    My name is xxx. I am nineteen years old. I was born in Tao-yuan, Taiwan. I am a generous, easy-going and interesting person.

    There are four people in my family. My father is an engineer who has to be away from home for official business all the times. I am so grateful that I have a sweet family. My parents put much emphasis on my education, interests, future advance, and encourage me in learning language.

    Now I study in Nanya Institute Technology, majoring in English. I am elected to be a class guidance officer and hygiene officer. I also take part in drama contests more than once to be an important role. I have certificates about Chinese-typing qualification/license and CPR and First Aid qualification/license.

    Among all courses, I enjoy cooking and drawing especially. When I do something I want to do, I feel quiet in mind and peace in disposition. My ambition in career is to become a successful designer and to be able to cook well.

    After graduation from school, I 'd like to learn more on cogitation and color scheme. Confidence is the first step on the road to success, so I have decided to be a person who are ambitious and modest at the same time. I am sure I can make it.

  • Sam
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    有些地方看不懂你要說甚麼。最好你用國語寫出來,我們幫你翻。

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