英文文法達人--幫忙改之

這篇是我當下的心情,

只是有文法錯誤吧~~因為我很愛中翻英=ˇ=

爲了加強以及改善自己的writing. .

懇請英文達人幫小妹我改之. .

並且附註說明(也就是why & where is the problem). .

順便也可以跟我說一下怎麼加強自己的writing!!

感激不盡!!! :)

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I was extremely upset. . .

cuz sth just went wrong. . .

Some day, u told me that

ur mom was finding a place where could afford us to talk with foreigner teacher

I was happy then.

I was a little afraid of speaking,

but I knew that’s a good way to prove my pronunciation and oracy.

Thursday,

u sent me a message,

told me the time ur mom picked.

I checked my schedule; I just could attend half of all classes.

3 classes I am in Japan,

1 is SH class reunion,

1 is the music concert. . .

It\'s awful,

I told u, and u told me to find the days I could.

It\'s really hard,

choir is like a walking bomb . . .

ok, I FINALLY composed ten days we all could. . .

A message which u sent wrong,

I saw it,

u were going to find the other person could match ur time. . .

M t y heart sank a little hen.

Class reunion changed time SO today I checked it again,

I wouldn’t absent just six . .

*attendance rate: two-thirds, still a low percent

I arranged it once more,

yeah, it totally threw in our times. . .

it wasn\'t easy, but I was proud of myself finishing. =]

I sent u two messages,

but u didn\'t respond me any. .

I called u during about ten, u didn\'t answered me. . .

ten thirty,

my phone made a sound,

it\'s u,

u told me that it can\'t be changed easily,

and gave me the phone number. . .

I still can go to the class, I knew. .

but who can accompany with me, nobody. . .

I was upset, extremely upset. . .

The person u found was me,

how could u never asked me about my schedule and arranged it on ur own,

Selfish. . .

Don\'t u know how much that I want to take the course. . .

I was upset, extremely upset. . .

I was angry, totally bristle in anger. . .

u r my best friend, so I don\'t want to make row with u. .

but u really hurt me this time, baby. . .

I can\'t let it go. .

I can\'t wipe off the scar. . .

How HURT it was!!

The first time, I wish it could also be the last.

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    I was very upset and going creay ,because of something goes not well

    few days ago ,you told me that my mother was seeking for some English class ,where i can learn how to speak flunt english there . i am so happy about that .

    actually ,i am quite afread to speak english out .but i still think its a good way to learn speaking english well .

    thuraday .yopu sent me a message to tell me the scheule picked by your mom .then i checked my time .i can only take half of the classe because of some reason .

    thats so bad , i told you so ,but you told me to seeking class myself .its so difficult to me ,

    but then , i still found ten class both of us are available.

    you sendt me a wrong message ,which make my heart hened

    the class change time so i arrange it again ,because i couldnt absent these class.

    then anythig goes well .i am happy about that.

    i sent you two message ,but you never reply me one.

    then i called you .you still dont pick the phone up.

    long time later ,you called me to tell me that i cant change the time easily .i fell weird.

    but i need somebody go to class with me ,thats all.

    the repson you fould is me ,how could you change the class yourself .you are so selfish i think.

    dont you know that how much do i love to go to the class i am so angry with you now.

    i am going creazy.

    i regard you as my best friend .i dont hope i scold you just because the chicken thing like this .

    i couldnt forget this experience ,i hope it wont be happened anymore.

    i hope this is last time .

    參考資料: 我自己打的 給你參考 這應該是你的日記八
  • 1 0 年前

    I was extremely upset because something went wrong lately.

    One day, you told me that mom found a cram school where we could talk with foreigner teacher. I was happy then.

    I was a little afraid of speaking out, but I knew that it is a good way to develop my pronunciation and oracy.

    This thursday, you sent me a message which was about the time your mom picked.

    Checking my schedule, I just could participate in half of the classes.

    Three clases in Japan, one class is reunionation another is that we have to go to a music concert.

    It was awful. I told you before, and you replied me to find the days I could.

    It was really hard, choir is like a working bomb but I had done. I chose ten days we all could join the class together eventually.

    The message which you sent wrong that I saw it. It was about that you wanted to find the other person who could accommodate your time.

    My tender heart sank beneath the waves.

    The time of class reunionation had changed, had I checked my schedule again. I wouldn't absent at six.[看不懂]

    *attendance rate: two-thirds, it still a low percent

    I arranged it once more. Yeah, it totally threw in our times. It wasn't easy, but I was proud of myself finish it! [看不懂]

    It was ten thirty, my phone made a sound. It was you, you told me that it can't be changed easily, and gave me the phone number.[看不懂]

    I still can go to the class, I knew. But who can accompany with me, "nobody."

    I was upset, extremely upset.

    The person you found was me, how could you never asked me about my schedule and arranged it on your own. Selfish. . .

    Do you know how many times that I wanted to take the course.

    I was upset, extremely upset.

    I was angry, totally bristle in anger.

    You are my best friend, so I don't want to make much row on you. But you really hurt me this time, baby. I can't let it go. I can't wipe off the scar.

    How disappointed I was!!

    It was the first time, and I wished it could also be the last time.

    我幾乎全部都改過,很多我都看不懂在寫什麼,但是我盡力的去想像你的情境,不過有時後當你的下文我也看不懂時,我就不知道你要講什麼了,希望對你有幫助!

    My best wishes!

    2006-07-01 10:18:07 補充:

    沒關係,我只是提供我的意見,我也有很多看不懂的地方,請不要見怪,至於有一點我很好奇,你是如何知道我的

    E-mail?

    參考資料: Myself
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