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急~訂正英文作文..(看文法有沒有錯..文章順不順..)

The Role Music Plays in My Life

Music plays a really important role in my life.

I listen to music whenever I do everything. Yes, everything-include studying. Then, many people must feel very surprised about that. Actually, I listen to different kinds of music in different works. Different kinds of music make different efforts.

For example, I listen to light music when I study, so that I can calm down and study more intently. And I listen to Eglish songs when I do housework. By the way, my favorite singer is Blue. It' s a group which is made up by four boys who are Englishmen. Their voice can really makes people feel great. What' s more, they all have handsome faces. To be honest, I' m not the kind of people that very care about appearance. But it' s almost impossible that a man can sing very well and have such a handsome face. 更何況這裡還有4個呢!

Besides pop music, I enjoy listening to old songs, too. I love their melodies so much that I never get tired of them no matter how many times I listen to them. And the lyrics sound meaningful than other songs. Morever, many old songs even have a lovely story behind them.

I can hardly live without music. It can comfort me when I am down and also make me relax when I feel tired. 總之Music really enhances my life so much.

還有一些需要翻譯

麻煩囉~~~謝謝!!!^^

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  • 1 0 年前
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    The Role Music Plays in My Life(上面的那位~這題目沒錯啊!!還可以等於The Role That Music Plays in My Life~是省略關代的用法喔!)

    Music plays a really important role in my life.

    I love listening to music no matter what I do or where I am─ even in sleeping and studying. Does it sound a little unbelievable? But that's true! Many people feel surprised of my special attitude to music. I know it might be hard to understand for others. However, for me, music has magic power and it is the key to increase my work efficiency. Actually, I listen to different kinds of music in different time. Different kinds of music make different efforts.

    For example, I listen to light music when I study, so that I can calm down and study more intently. I also listen to English songs( almost pop music) if I have to do my housework. By the way, the top one singer in my mind is Blue, a group which is made up by four young Englishmen. Their voice sound so great and always make me feel comfortable. What's more, they are all good looking! To be honest, I' m not that kind of people which care about appearance. But it's really hard to find a group which has wonderful talent and gorgeous face at the same time.

    Besides pop music, I enjoy listening to golden oldie, too.(用golden oldie<經典老歌>比old song好喔!) I'll never get tired of these beautiful melody, no matter how many times I listen to them. I even believe that there is a lovely story behind each oldie, especially lyric oldie. Therefore, the lyric oldie can easily touch my heart more than others can.

    “How can I live without music?”I often ask myself just like this. Music riches my life and release my tired heart. If you really want me to describe how imporant music in my life, I can just say“water for fish as like music for me!”

    我做了較多的修改~但並非你原先的不好喔~而是我的靈感突然湧上來^_^

    希望對你有幫助~~

    2006-09-04 03:30:28 補充:

    有些符號突然變亂碼了~註1.『'』是代表一撇縮寫的符號註2.用golden oldie《經典老歌》比old song好喔!

    2006-09-04 23:28:17 補充:

    to:不再有的溫柔

    真的啊~你留學哪一國呢?英國嗎?我明年要去英國讀書~如果你是留英的~我可以多多請教你嗎?^^

    2006-09-04 23:38:07 補充:

    你竟然會用投票的~讓我有點小失望~@@

    雖然如此~我還是希望若你真的要交作業~可以參考我寫的~因為另一位大大為你修改的仍有一些文法上的錯誤(沒有惡意喔^^)~隨便舉個例子~例如~第二行的include應該要改成including(變分詞)~雖然我覺得用這句寫起來~感覺上太過口語~但若是你覺得不要緊~那我也不好再說什麼...That’s all!

    參考資料: 我覺得寫的還不錯喔!(一個小小的外文系學生^_^)
  • 1 0 年前

    其實我覺得你寫得不錯

    只不過有些地方感覺上不非常順

    我移民到加拿大九年了

    真覺得你寫的不錯

    只不過有點可惜的就是我很想幫你進一步地改

    但是已經開始投票了

    所以 加油吧

    相信你會更好的

  • 1 0 年前

    你及我也急,通常附詳解的我

    也不詳細解說嚕,加星號ㄉ是有改ㄉ地方

    The Role *of Music Plays in My Life

    Music plays *are really important role in my life.

    I listen to music whenever I do *anything. Yes, everything-"even include studying. *Therefore, many people must feel very surprised about that. Actually, I listen to different kinds of music in different works. Different kinds of music make(*have different effects.) different efforts.

    For example, I listen to light music when I study, so that I can calm down and study more intently. And I listen to Eglish songs when I do housework. *In additional, my favorite singer is Blue. It' s a *band which is made up *of four boys who are *English. Their voice can really makes people feel great. What' s more, they all have handsome faces. To be honest, I' m not the kind of people that very care about appearance. But it' s almost impossible that a man can sing very well and have such a handsome face. 更何況這裡還有4個呢! (Even more, there are four of them)

    Besides pop music, I enjoy listening to old songs, too. I love their melodies so much that *I'll(I will) never get tired of them no matter how many times I listen to them. And the lyrics *are meaningful than (other songs)->(those songs nowadays). Morever, many old songs even have a lovely story behind them.

    I can hardly live without music. It can comfort me when I am down and also make me relax when I feel tired. Anyway,music really enhances my life *(so much 省)*.

    多指教!!

    2006-09-03 23:47:19 補充:

    抱歉title有誤The Role of Music in My Life或How music plays in my life

    2006-09-04 23:20:38 補充:

    謝謝糾正文法!!

    嗯嗯~~沒錯

    抱歉呦! 留國外,文法越來越差嚕@@

    2006-09-07 12:30:24 補充:

    Im not in England now.

    Just that i'm planning to go to Au Next year..For my college life^_^

    參考資料: My brain cells
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