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請幫我修改一下這篇文章的英文文法有無錯誤。20點

The Hunchback of Notre Dame is a describe the situation that the grotesque hunchbacked bell-ringer in Notre Dame in Paris, Quasimodo. He and the gypsies, Esmeralda, they form a deep friendship. Viewers are very impressed by the film.

This film not only the song is pretty but also drama is good-looking, and the film elaborated in the selfish, detail, racial discrimination of human nature with all to present in the film.

Character

Poor Quasimodo, he suffers the pain of being stretched and pulled apart as well as being publicly humiliated by the crowd of people, who hate him for his ugliness. In fact, he owns a kindly and innocence heart on his terrible face.

Outwardly Phoebus is a captain of the royal archers that looks handsome, but he is a true playa. Phoebus cheated the innocence of a girl-fleur-de-Lys, he wheedle heart out of her. When Esmeralda rescue is brought about by Phoebus. He falls mistakenly in love with her.

In people’s eyes, he is affable and kind, and he is a merciful archdeacon. However, Frollo watches and becomes insanely jealous of Phoebus. His obsessive lust for La Esmerelda has made him renounce God and study alchemy and black magic. Frollo went to Destroy Esmeralda, and let her taste the fires of hell, or else let her be mine and mine alone! therefore He is incapable of becoming an object of worship.

Esmeralda lives the life of a Gypsy. She is dancer. However Esmeralda is a bit different from the past another girls. She’s a little bit physically stronger and tougher. She herself is homeless and has been discriminated against; she sympathizes and relates to Quasimodo as no one ever has before.

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鐘樓怪人是一部描寫一位在巴黎天主聖母院外表醜陋駝背的敲鐘人,加西莫多。. 他和一位吉普賽女郎,艾斯梅拉達所產生的深厚情誼。劇中詳細闡述了人性的自私,貪婪,種疾歧視。

人物

從外表上看來腓比斯是一個英俊的騎士隊長,但他花心。他欺騙了純真少女的感情,他只懂得甜言蜜語。他已無可救藥的愛上她。

事實上,在他那可怕的臉龐下卻有顆善良純真的心。

在一般人的眼中,他是慈祥和藹的,且又是個慈悲的大好人。他根本沒有資格受到眾人的敬仰。

ps : 這是大蓋的翻譯,英文中有的是之後加上去的,只要看文法正不正確就好,拜託了~~

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    我沒有html工具可用...所以排版有點亂...

    不知道你這是哪部鐘樓怪人的影片...

    看起來不是迪士尼的(因裡面沒有花心的Phoebus)... 我猜是法國那部歌舞劇...

    通常film指的是電影...可以用play或drama來泛指戲劇...或用musical來指歌舞片(劇)

    不過還是看你需要...所以下面不改....

    The Hunchback of Notre Dame describes*(文法很怪,不會解釋) the situation

    that a*(第一次提到,不用the) grotesque hunchbacked bell-ringer in (應該沒錯,

    但片名也用of,改成of會不會比較好?) Notre Dame in Paris, Quasimodo. He and the gypsy* (應該用單數,後面還可以加girl,如果你要強調的話), Esmeralda,

    *(前面句子還沒結束,故不重複用they) form(個人覺得用develop會更好) a deep

    friendship. Viewers are very impressed by the film.

    This film has* not only pretty songs* but also great plot* (照你原來的用法,主詞太亂了,而且重複,所以把歌曲和劇情歸納到戲的下一層會更清楚,歌曲不只一條所以用複數,劇情用plot,good-looking通常用來指外觀), and it*(建議不要重複)

    elaborates* the selfishness*(用名詞)and greed* of human nature (貪婪應該是這個字,而且只有這兩項是人性), racial discrimination in detail*.

    Character

    Poor Quasimodo, he suffers from* the pain of being stretched and pulled apart as well as

    being publicly humiliated by the crowd*(可以直接指人群,不用再of people) that*(不用,) hate him for his ugliness on his terrible face.(心怎麼會在臉上)

    In fact, he owns a kind* and innocent*(用形容詞) heart .

    Outwardly, Phoebus is a captain of the royal archers that looks handsome,

    but he is a true playboy*. Phoebus cheated the innocence of a girl-fleur-de-Lys,

    he wheedle heart out of her. When Esmeralda is rescued by Phoebus*.

    (不知道你的意思是不是這樣子,原本那句我看不懂)

    He falls mistakenly in love with her.

    In people’s eyes, Frollo*(第一次提到先講名字,尤其主角又和上一段不同)

    is affable and kind, and he is a merciful archdeacon. However, he* watches and

    becomes insanely jealous of Phoebus. His obsessive lust for La Esmerelda has

    made him renounce God and study alchemy and black magic. Frollo wants* to

    destroy Esmeralda, and let her taste the fires of hell, or else let her be mine and mine alone!

    (這句看起來又像迪士尼的,是綜合很多片的嗎?)

    Therefore*, he* is incapable of becoming an object of worship.

    Esmeralda lives the life of a Gypsy. She is dancer. However, Esmeralda is a bit

    different from the past other* girls. She’s a little bit physically stronger and tougher.

    She herself is homeless and has been discriminated against;

    she sympathizes and relates to Quasimodo as no one ever has before.

    參考資料: 自己(我也很喜歡鐘樓怪人)
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