ghettostar 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

有關我的作文文法修正

這是我的作文 ,我的文法不好

所以有很多地方都不知道對不對

老師有幫我修改但沒有告訴我如何更正

請各位專家能夠幫我修正我的錯誤

並提出文法建議並告訴我文法不對的地方並解釋

謝謝各位

如有更好的替代句子 也請您們提出建議 謝謝!!!

(前兩段已經有專家替我 修正過 但我想還是全部打上來請各位修正更好http://tw.knowledge.yahoo.com/question/?qid=120609... )

"Rome was not build in a day". The second reason why I prefer the Roman Empire is about about life style,lavish life style.The second reason why I prefer the Roman Empire is about life style,lavish life style.It virtually lived in a modern city.Similar with the city that I am living in.Even better than the city that I am living in.Drama in amphitheater,hourse racing in stadium and bathing pools everywhere. I can't find bathing pools (everywhere) in present.

The best histrorical adventure film I have seen was "Gladiator" which won five Academy Awards in the 73rd Academy Awards ceremony. It is the most personal reason that why I would love to live in the Roman Empire.Before I watched the Movie "Gladiator",I didn't know anything about this country and this age .The main actor (present)a wonderful interpretation of the movie.I comprehended the meaning of the word " Gladiator" through his portray.

If I were born in the past ,the Roman Empire would be the first chice to live in It Provided resemble life style compare to nowadays.The movie"Gladiator" really appeals to me to know more about the Roman Empire.

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To Witchery,

因為我的文法基礎很差我現在也想要靠多寫文章來修正,可不可以請您給點意見,關於我的太過複雜,舉個例子大概說明一下,因為我女朋友也說我常常綴字太多但我還不是很了解,請你大概說明一下,這樣我將受用無窮,謝謝你了 .~~~

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    整個用句看起來似乎通順,可是每句話都複雜化了,很多看不懂你要表達的到底是什麼。

    2006-09-29 11:11:49 補充:

    I can't find bathing pools (everywhere) in present.

    他應該是要你修成- anywhere

    但我知道你想表達的應該是說,以前到處都有澡池,但現在不會到處都有澡池

    如果修成anywherer就會變成說現在哪裡都找不到澡池,意思有差。

    基本上我覺得以你的意思來說,這句話是通順的。你可以去解釋給你的老師你真正的意思,然後問他應該怎麼改,因為至少我覺得是通順的

    The main actor (present)a wonderful interpretation of the movie.

    - presents - The main actor = he 所以是he presents

    2006-11-27 11:21:36 補充:

    抱歉現在才看到你的問題~基本上我也不敢說自己文法很好。文法的定義也不是三兩句交代的清楚的,不過我建議你與其用多寫來練習,不如多讀。因為多讀你才能吸收正確的文法使用方法。我的文法也是多讀文章學來的,久了以後自然而然就會知道怎麼樣是對怎麼樣是錯。到時有些文法你會一看到就會覺得不對勁。

  • 1 0 年前

    恩 謝謝你的建議~~~~

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