佩姬 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

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如題!!

請各位大大幫忙改改我的作文~

看看我是否有錯誤的地方~

或是覺得那些句子應該怎麼寫比較好之類的~

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King Store

[第一段]I like reading! I especially like reading at the King Store. What a nice and peaceful place there is. When I have free time, I always go to read some books about novel or magazine. King Store is environs between my apartment and my school.

[第二段]King store is a chain of retail stores. Look this store’s decoration that there are bright light and books full of variety. The floor of there is made of wood. And there has four stories. There not only sells books but also sells a lot of stationery.

[第三段]On this weekend, there are many people at the King Store. I am there with my friend, Tina. We are reading constellations of the book and talking about contents. Some people are reading and picking a good book for themselves. They look immersed. Some children are sitting the floor and reading some comic books. Their parents are waiting patiently.

[第四段]I feel unrestrained and comfortable at the King Store. There is good place to go to the acquisition of knowledge.

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  • T J
    Lv 4
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    King Store

    [第一段]I like reading! I especially like reading at the King Store. What a nice and peaceful place there is. When I have free time, I always go to read some books about novel or magazine. King Store is environs between my apartment and my school.

    -->I like reading! especially, at the King Stone. What a nice and peaceful place to stay. When I have spare time, I always sit there and read some novels or magazine. By the way, the King Stone is located between my apartment and my school.

    [第二段]King store is a chain of retail stores. Look this store’s decoration that there are bright light and books full of variety. The floor of there is made of wood. And there has four stories. There not only sells books but also sells a lot of stationery.

    -->King Stone is a chain of four-story retail store, whose decoration is with bright light and whose floor is made of wood. Its collection is full of varieties, however, it does not only sell books but also a lot of starioneries.

    [第三段]On this weekend, there are many people at the King Store. I am there with my friend, Tina. We are reading constellations of the book and talking about contents. Some people are reading and picking a good book for themselves. They look immersed. Some children are sitting the floor and reading some comic books. Their parents are waiting patiently.

    --> In this weekend, there were so many people at the King Stone. I was there with my friend, Tina. We were reading a constellation book and discussing about its content. Some people were reading and some of them were picking books for themselves. All of them seemed immersed. There were also childrens who were sitting on the floor and reading comic books, meanwhile, their parents were waiting patiently.

    [第四段]I feel unrestrained and comfortable at the King Store. There is good place to go to the acquisition of knowledge.

    --> I feel urestrained and comfortable staying at the King Stone, and the more importance thing is that it is a nice place to acquire knowledge.

    參考資料: me
  • 1 0 年前

    [第一段]

    I always go to read some books about novel or magazine.

    → I always go to read some novels or magazines.

    King Store is environs between my apartment and my school.

    → King Store is located between my apartment and my school.

    [第二段]

    Look this store’s decoration that there are bright light and books full of variety.

    → This store is decorated with bright lights and a variety of books.

    And there has four stories.

    → And it's a 4-story building.

    [第三段]

    所有的詞態都要改成過去式,因為你是說『On this weekend』,代別是過去的事了

    We are reading constellations of the book and talking about contents.

    → We were reading a book of constellation and talking about contents.

    They look immersed.

    → They were immersed in books.

    Some children are sitting the floor and reading some comic books.

    → Some children were sitting on the floor and reading some comic books.

    [第四段]

    There is good place to go to the acquisition of knowledge.

    → It is a good place to acquire knowledge.

    ---歡迎大家指教---

    參考資料: 英文系的我
  • 怡君
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    King Bookstore (你指的是金石堂吧!)

    [第一段]I do like reading, especially at the King Bookstore.

    What a nice and peaceful place to read.

    When I have free time, I always go there to read some novels or various magazines. The location of King Bookstore is between my apartment and my school.

    [第二段]King Bookstore is a chain of retail stores.

    In general, the store’s decoration is bright and with a wide-range selection of books. The store floor is often made by wood.

    It has four floors (妳是指有四層樓吧).

    King Bookstore not only sells books but also sells a lot of useful stationery for schools and offices.

    [第三段]During the weekend, there are many people at the King Bookstore. I am also there with my friend, Tina.

    We often read the book about constellations and discuss about the contents. Some people look through first then choose a good book for themselves. They look immersed.

    Children like to sit on the floor to read some comic books.

    Their parents also can read or wait patiently.

    [第四段]I feel unrestrained and comfortable at the King Bookstore.

    It is the best place to update your information or gain more knowledge.

    妳寫得不錯了! 多嘗試用片語或是同義詞來做變化

    多加油了 :-D

    參考資料: me
  • 1 0 年前

    @@KingStone 金石堂嗎????????????????????????????還是國王商店King Store....

    [第二段]@@The floor of there is made of wood.................made改building吧 不然好像有2個動詞

    @@There not only sells books but also sells a lot of stationery.....There (are)漏掉

    [第三段]@@We are reading constellations of the book and talking about contents.........

    and talking about (the books) contents 不知為啥 感覺加了較順

    @@Some children are sitting the floor.....sitting (on) the floor

    [第四段]@@There is good place ....There is (a) good place

    2006-11-16 19:43:41 補充:

    There not only sells books but also sells a lot of stationery改There are not only selling books but also selling a lot of stationery

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