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請幫我檢查文法是否有錯誤

我寫的一些自我介紹

My name is Shr-Bin Gau. I study in the Polymer Engineering Department at National Taiwan University of Science and Technology.

I am now 22 years old and live in Taipei. My family consists of my father, mother, a sister and my self. I enjoy many things, especially playing basketball, Tennis, and computer. Also, I have a sense of responsibility, and I like to learn new things.

As an polymer major, I have more chances to practice polymeric techniques, laboratory safety and management. Also, I have taken some courses in polymer chemistry, Management of Manufactorys, and Polymer Physics.

I believe I will do well in polymeric field, I hope I have the chance to develop my interests and capabilities here.

Finally, I would like to thank everyone who has made my participation so enjoyable.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    嗨 版大~我幫你修改一些文法並在做一些用詞上的修飾 (藍色粗字體) 希望這樣會讓你的文章看起來比較順暢:My name is Shr-Bin Gau. I study Polymer Engineering at National Taiwan University of Science and Technology. I am now 22 years old and live in Taipei. My family members are my father, mother, and a sister. I enjoy many things, especially playing basketball, tennis, and computer. Also, I have a sense of responsibility, and I like to learn new things.As a polymer major, I have more chances to practice polymeric techniques, laboratory safety and management. In addition, I have taken some courses in Polymer Chemistry, Management of Manufactorys, and Polymer Physics.I believe I can do well in the polymeric field, and I hope I have the chance to develop my competence and capabilities here. Finally, I would like to thank everyone who has made my participation so enjoyable. ----------------------------------------------------------------------註解:study + 主修就行了 不需要用到 department可以用 My family consists of ... 可是這樣太文鄒鄒了 英文基本上越明簡越好 至於 myself (是連起來寫的) 就不用了 ^^"polymeric 的開頭不是母音 所以不能用 an 要用 aalso & in addition 是通用的 但也可以換換別的詞這樣讀者才不會覺得乏味或是饒舌(這裡其實可以不用換啦 但只不過是一點點小小的意見 ^^)如果你其他科目的開頭有有大寫的話 那麼其他所有的科目開頭也要大寫在申請工作的自我推薦函裡 can 的語氣跟意圖會比用 will 來的強烈跟恰當要注意定冠詞的運用interest 在這封推薦函裡不算是用的很好 你可以說 I am interested in XXX 但是如果是找工作的話老闆看的是你的能力而不是說你可以如何發展你的興趣 所以我幫你把 interest 換成 competence (勝任 稱職的意思) 而capabilities用的很好就這樣囉~ 如果有什麼問題歡迎來信請教 ^^也祝你求職順利!! ;)

    2006-11-18 12:38:52 補充:

    嗨 紅豆妹~

    I am now 22 years old 跟 I am 22 years old now 其實是一樣的喔

    兩者皆可用啦 呵呵!!

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    1 0 年前

    My name is Shr-Bin Gau. I'm studying Polymer Engineering in National Taiwan University of Science and Technology.

    I am 22 (years old) and living in Taipei. My family memebers include my father, mother, a sister and me. I enjoy many things, especially playing basketball, tennis, and computer. Moreover, I'm a very responsible personal, and enjoy in learning new things.

    As having a polymer major, I have more chances to practice polymeric techniques, laboratory safety and management. By the way, I have taken some courses in polymer chemistry, Management of Manufactorys, and Polymer Physics.

    I believe I will do well in polymeric field, I hope I'll have a chance to develop my interests and capabilities here.

    Finally, I would like to thank everyone who has made my participation so enjoyable.

    參考資料: me
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  • 1 0 年前

    I am now 22 years old 這句應該是錯ㄉ吧

    應該是 I am 22 years old now 才對(我想是)

    my self 這個好像沒分開吧

    應該是myself

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