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My Family

Family is important for everybody. It is like a harbor which is just for you. And my family is also very important for me. It is like my second life.

When I was sad, my little sisters always made me to smile. When I failed in something, my mom told me “Failure is the mother of success” and let me be full-hearted. When I had problems, my dad helped me timely. When I grow up, they accompany me with sweat, eyewater and smile and gave me a memorable childhood.

In my family, every thing must to share. My elder sister often shares her mood with me and I also tell her a lot of things about my school. My little sister usually plays basketball and also shares the skill of basketball with me. She is a great basketball player in her basketball team. I’m proud of her. My mom likes to share how to cook and do housework. She hopes her daughter will be a good wife. My father talks to me about the news and tells me some principles in passing.

There is no a lot of money in my family. There is many warmth and laughs in my family. This my family .How is you family?

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  • 1 0 年前
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    My Family

    The Family is important for everybody. It likes a harbor which is just for you. And my family is also very important for me. It likes my second life.

    When I was sad, my little sisters always made me smile. When I failed in something, my mom always told me “Failure is the mother of success” and made me be full-hearted. When I had troubes, my dad helped me timely. Since I was a kid, they accompany me with sweat, eyewater and smile and gave me a memorable childhood.

    In my family, every thing surely shares. My elder sister often shares her mood with me and I also tell her a lot of things about my school. My little sister likes to play basketball and teaches the skill of basketball to me(or shares the experience of playing baskerball with me). She is a great basketball player in her basketball team, so I’m proud of her. My mom likes to share how to cook and do housework because she hopes her daughter will be a good wife. My father talks to me about the news which i don't know and tells me some principles in passing because he want to make me be maturer .

    We are not rich. However,in my family, there are many warmth and laughs. This is my well-being family .How about your family?

    因為時間不夠 只能稍微改一下

    建議你 可以把when 代換成if

    然後有些句子可以用so, but however therefore although 等等來連接

    然後 有些句子 可以改成分詞構句

    你有少打一些動詞

    抱歉 有些句子 雖然文法對..

    但是 較少人這樣子講

    所以我有改

    但是 如果還有錯的話 那請多包含@@

    2006-11-19 00:26:55 補充:

    The Family is important for everybody. It is like a harbor which is just for you. And my family is also very important for me. It is like my second life. 我第一段有誤= = 被第一個人的文章誤導了

    參考資料: 趕著出門 很急的我
  • 1 0 年前

    第一篇改的第一個就錯了,"like"在這裡是當「像是...」而不是「喜歡(動詞)」,所以根本不可能加s。本來寫的is like.. 才是正確的英文。

  • 1 0 年前

    My Family

    Family is important to everybody. It is like a harbor which I can get complete protection. And my family is also very important to me.

    When I was sad, my younger sisters always made me to smile. When I failed in something, my mom told me “Failure is the important step to reach success” and made me be full-hearted. When I had problems, my dad helped me timely. when I was a teenager, they kept me company with their sweat, tears and smile .They really gave me a unforgettable childhood.

    In my family, every thing is must to share. My older sister often shares her mood with me and I also tell her a lot of things about my school. My younger sister usually plays basketball and also shares the skill with me. She is a great basketball player in her basketball team. I’m proud of her. My mom likes to share how to cook and does housework. She hopes her daughter will be a good wife. My father talks to me about the news and tells me some principles in how to pass the exam. My family is not wealthy.But there is full with warmth and laughs in my family. This is my precious family .What about you family?

    參考資料: 自己
  • 1 0 年前

    My Family

    Family is important for everybody. It is like(is去掉改likes) a harbor which is just for you. And my family is also very important for me. It is like(is去掉改likes) my second life.

    When I was sad, my little sisters always made me to(to删掉) smile. When I failed in something, my mom told me “Failure is the mother of success” and let me be full-hearted. When I had problems, my dad helped me timely. When I grow up, they accompany me with sweat, eyewater and smile and gave me a memorable childhood.

    In my family, every thing must to share. My elder sister often shares her mood with me and I also tell her a lot of things about my school. My little sister usually plays basketball and also shares the skill of basketball with me. She is a great basketball player in her basketball team. I’m proud of her. My mom likes to share how to cook and do housework. She hopes her daughter will be a good wife. My father talks to me about the news and tells me some principles in passing.

    There is no(改we don't have) a lot of money in my family. There is many warmth and laughs in my family. This my family .How is(改about)you family?

    參考資料: 我ㄉ大腦
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