fantazy 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

求英文書信達人照書信規格幫減少不需要的內容且要通順

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Dear Sir/Madam

My cousin Teresa Volpe and I are planning to open a shop in Londan.It is still in a terrible mess.We have to clean it and paint it.we would like to sell Australian and Italian products. We think this is a good idea because Teresa is form Italy and I'm from Australia. Can you please send us a list of suppliers for Australian products,including:

-things like boomerangs

-T-shirt and clothes with aboriginal patterns

(I have got a T-shirt like this and I really love it )

-any other ideas?

It is very difficult to know who to contact so we would be very happy if you could help.

We are also interested in having more information about the following:

-How about trade fairs?We don't know where they are.

-I also think magazines that advertise Australian produtcts might be a good place to look for information.

Thank you for yor assistance

Yours faithfully

Peter Clapton

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    寫商業信函要越簡潔越好

    不需要寫到個人的事情或個人想的事情

    我幫你刪除了許多不需要的句子

    還有對方怎麼會同時有澳洲跟義大利的suppliers' lists呢

    我懷疑,因此我只選單一國

    如果你是收信人

    我刪了這麼多的句子

    你懂我要什麼嗎

    Dear Sir/Madam,

    We are planning to open a shop in London. We would like to sell Australian products. Would you please send us a list of suppliers of Australian products, including:

    -Boomerangs

    -T-shirts and clothes with aboriginal patterns

    Please let me know the name of the contact person at your company. We are also interested in having more information about the trade fairs and would like know where they are.

    Thank you for your assistance

    Yours faithfully,

    Peter Clapton

  • 1 0 年前

    Dear Sir/Madam

    My cousin Teresa Volpe and I are planning to open a shop in Londan.It is still in a terrible mess.We have to clean THE WHOLE SHOP and paint THE WALL.we would like to sell Australian and Italian products. We think this is a good idea because Teresa is form Italy and I'm from Australia. Can you please send us a list of suppliers for Australian products?I WILL BE VERY APPRECIATE THAT THE LIST includ AS FOLLOW;

    -things like boomerangs

    -T-shirt and clothes with aboriginal patterns

    (I have got a T-shirt like this and I really love it )

    - other FRESH ideas?

    IT'S HARD FOR US TO FIND THE CONTACT PERSON IN AUSTRALIA

    WOULD YOU ALSO PROVIDE more information about the following:

    -THE INFORMATION OF THE LOCATION OF TRAD FAIRS

    -CONTACT PERSON INFORMATION OF ALL THE PRODUCTS

    -SOME MAGAZINE WITH LOCAL INFORMATION

    Thank you for yor assistance

    BEST REGARD,

    Peter Clapton

    ~~我用大寫來改希望有幫助 ^^

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