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When I was a child, one of my dreams is to go abroad to study. I still remember every time when I watch America film, the image of America life to me is leisurely and carefree. Opposite, in Taiwan, we always live in a hurry. Therefore, I yearn for the life of America very much. Fortunately, I have an opportunity to go abroad after me graduating from the high school last year.

When I just arrive at the airport of Los Angeles, I was a little nervous. Because of the people who around me are almost foreigner and they are speaking English. My English was really poor at that time, I afraid I cannot understand what they said. Luckily, just as what I thought, American are really friendly, they are so kind to me and let me feel not so nervous. I have left the good impression on U.S.A at the beginning. It is a really good beginning to me.

When I lived in Los Angeles, which is nothing serious problem to me. The reason why I can adapt quickly to the environment is that there are a lot of Chinese in here. I was still not used to eating America food, and Chinese restaurant are everywhere, that is so convenient to me.

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    When I was a child, one of my dreams was to be able to study abroad – particularly U.S. I gathered from Hollywood movies that U.S. lifestyle was leisurely and carefree that was quite the opposite from our Taiwan lifestyle that always seemed to be in a hurry.

    And that is the lifestyle I always yearn for.

    Last year after my graduation from high school I had the good fortune to fulfill my dream and left for U.S.

    When I arrived at the airport of Los Angeles, virtually (note: “virtually” means 99% and that allows for the occasional Chinese who might be at the airport, and that makes it more logical because you mentions Chinese further down) all the people around me were foreigner that spoke English. I was a little nervous because English was not my strong suit at that time and I was concerned if I could understand what they said. Luckily just like I thought Americans were really friendly and they went out of their way to make me feel at ease. Needless to say my first personal (note: “personal” means what you had in person as opposed to what you learned from the movies) impression of U.S. was a very good one.

    When I settled down in Los Angeles, I did not encounter any major problem in adjusting to that new city. A reason was there were many local Chinese residents that helped alleviate my cultural shock. Also Chinese restaurants were everywhere for the convenience of someone like me that was not used to eating America food.

    (Comment: Grammatically the “past tense” should have been used in describing an experience that happened last year, and also the logic and flow of the writing can be worked on. This is how I would word what you wrote – and bear in mind it’s only a matter of opinion).

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