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The most dramatic thing in my life.

4 years ago, I had a fight with my mom, she was very angry, too angry to control her

self, so she show my sister and me the door. We had no choose, my mom still lock the

door no matter what loudly we cry. Only one thing we can do that is back to Taipei my

grandmom home.

At the time, they are only 50 dollars in my pocket. But I am in Taichung. The important

thing is how could I use 50 dollars to back to Taipei. If I did not back to Taipei, where

could I go? Go the hell? After few mins. I had made a decision. I had plane in my mind.

I took the city bus to taichung train station .it’s cost me 20 dollars. In the train station I

bought a platform ticket. Than I get on the train. Everything is ok still the ticket

inspector came. I had no ticket and no money. So I lie to the ticket inspector I told him

that I am study in Taichung my family are all in Taipei , and something emergency that

my mom ask me back soon. My mom will buy the ticket when I get off the train. She is

waiting for me in the station. I think the ticket inspector believe in what I said. So he

ask me to the first coach to find him when I arrive to taoyuan but you know it

everything is build in the lie, my mom will never show up in the station so I have to

change other train. When I arrive to taoyuan I change to other train. When I arrive to

Taipei , I call my friend. She has bought 2 platform ticket and pick me out the station.

When I back into my grandmom’s home I saw my sister. She had brow 350 dollars from

her friend and took taxi to my grandmom’s home and call my uncle to paid the bill.

After 2days my grandmom send us home. Everything is getting better when we back to

taichung. That is the most dramatic thing in my life.

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    The most dramatic thing in my life.

    4 years ago, I had a fight with my mom.She was very angry and too angry to control herself, so she asked my sister and me to come to the door. We had no choose,and then my mom locked the door,she didn't changed her mind no matter how we cried loudly. Only one thing we could do is that back ourselves to my grandmom's home in Taipei.

    I am in Taichung then and only 50 dollars in my pocket.The important

    thing is how I use 50 dollars to go to Taipei.Where could I go if I did not go to Taipei? Go to hell? After few minutes, I had a decision. I had a plan in my mind.

    I took the city bus to Taichung train station .It costs me 20 dollars. In the train station I bought a ticket. Then I got on the train. Everything is O.K but the inspector came. I had no ticket and no money. So I lied to him:'' I am studying in Taichung but all my family are in Taipei , and I have some emergency that my mom asks me to back soon. My mom will buy a ticket when I get off the train. She is waiting for me at the station.'' The inspector believed what I said,so he asked me to find him at the first coach as long as I met my mom.But as you know, it is just built with my lies, my mom never appears at the station, therefore, I had to change other train then. So as I arrived in Taoyuan, I changed myself to other train. And when I arrived in Taipei , I called my friend. She had bought 2 tickets and picked me up at the station.

    When I backed myself to my grandmom's home, I saw my sister. She had borrowed 350 dollars from one of her friends, and took the taxi to my grandmom's home and then called my uncle to pay the bill.

    After 2 days ,my grandmom sent us home. Everything is getting better when we backed ourselves to Taichung. That is the most dramatic thing in my life.

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