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What is your name?

My English name is Aaron, which is derived from Jewish, means high mountain.

Where are you from?

I born in Tainan and brought up by my parents, and I live in Taipei now due to work reason.

What would yo like to do in your freetime?

Because I need to work from 9 to 6. So I would rather do something that can relas me, for instance, I go to watch DVD or listen to some light music.

Describe a song or a piece of music you like.

I'd like to introduce a song which is called "Somewhere out there". This is an American movie origainal track, which depicts a feeling aobut romance between a couple who live far away from each other. When I had listened to this song, while I was a high school student and it reminds me a young emotion and a romance of mine, so that I like it very much.

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現在是很流行一個英文單字的名字嗎?呵呵~

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u: 是的! 若是以電影的角度來看的話,以童聲版而言才是出現在電影中,它的確是講手足之情,可是若是以成人對唱版的歌而言,就可單單認為它是一首抒情歌, 至於想要定義它是人類的什麼情感可就因人而異,我想這就是音樂和文字的魅力了!

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  • Adam
    Lv 7
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    What is your name?

    My English name is Aaron, which is derived from Jewish, means high mountain.

    u大說得沒錯,Aaron應該是希伯來字源,在舊約聖經中Aaron是Moses的兄弟,如果你要在你的自傳中詳細介紹你的名字的話,可以加上這個典故,不過我想應該沒有必要,畢竟這只是你的英文名字,不是你真正的本名:

    My English name is Aaron, which, with its Hebrew derivation, (literally) means "high mountain."

    (BTW, Aaron好像也是郭富城的英文名字)

    (你的原句有三個動詞is、is derived、means,可是卻只有一個連接詞which,所以是有錯的)

    Where are you from?

    I born in Tainan and brought up by my parents, and I live in Taipei now due to work reason.

    I was born in Tainan, grew up there with my parents, but am currently living in Taipei because of my job.

    (保留你提到父母親的部份,但是做了一下文字的修改)

    What would yo like to do in your freetime?

    Because I need to work from 9 to 6. So I would rather do something that can relas me, for instance, I go to watch DVD or listen to some light music.

    Tired out from work due to my nine-to-six job, I'd rather do something restful and relaxing at my leisure, such as watchting DVDs or listening to some light music.

    (用tired out分詞片語做開頭,以強調你特別想要在下班後從事輕鬆的活動)

    Describe a song or a piece of music you like.

    I'd like to introduce a song which is called "Somewhere out there". This is an American movie origainal track, which depicts a feeling aobut romance between a couple who live far away from each other. When I had listened to this song, while I was a high school student and it reminds me a young emotion and a romance of mine, so that I like it very much.

    I have a strong liking for this song "Somewhere Out There." It's a song in the soundtrack of an American movie "An American Tale." The lyrics depict the romance of a couple who live far away from each other. The first time I listened to this song, I was in high school. Therefore, listening to this song always reminds me of my youth and an adolescent love story of my own. That's why I like it so much.

    (young emotion有點奇怪,換成我的青春歲月my youth吧)

    (romance似乎不太適合中學生,再者前面已出現過,為免重複,用青少年之愛情故事/青春愛情故事adolescent love story好了)

    參考資料: myself
  • O
    Lv 6
    1 0 年前

    What is your name?

    My name is Aaron, which came from Hebrew, meaning mountain.

    註.是「希伯來文」,沒有「猶太文」這種東西。另外Aaron的字源也不是山,而是戰士,獅子,殉教者之類的。

    Where are you from?

    I was born in Tainan. I am living and working in Taipei now.

    註.沒有必要不必說自己是父母養的...(同理也不用註明自己是自然生產之類的)

    What would yo like to do in your freetime?

    註.問題怪怪的... 應該是"What do you.."除非是有特殊用意(那就更怪了)

    As I work from 9 to 6 everyday, I like doing something relaxing. For instance, watching DVD or listening to some light music.

    Describe a song or a piece of music you like.

    I like the song "Somewhere out there" from the soundtrack of An American Tail. This song portrays the romance between a couple seperated by a long distance. I was in high school when I first heard this song, and it reminded me of a similar story of my own. That's why I liked this song.

    註.咦!?那首歌是在講姐弟之間的手足之情唷!如果打破你年輕時的回憶就對不起囉!

  • 1 0 年前

    1.提到英文名的來源實在很奇怪 除非你真是有猶太血統...^^;

    2. I "was" born in Tainan.

    brought up by my parents?<-正常都是如此 不需要提

    I was born in Tainan and grow up there. Now I live in Taipei because of my job.

    3. Starting a sentence with because is a bit of no no in English. Get rid of it.

    I work from 9 to 6 so I would rather do things that can relax me. For instance, watching dvd and listening to some soft music.

    3. One of my favorite pieces of music is "Somewhere out there" from the soundtracks of 電影名. It depicts the feeling of a loving couple who has been seperated far away from each other. I first heard this piece when I was in high school and it reminded me of a relastionship I had. That is why I like it very much.

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