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The most embarrassing thing that ever happened~~這是題目

I think the embarrassing thing that everyone must be had , sometimes it is very funny . But sometimes it is very very embarrassing .

And I am going to tell you that the embarrassing thing happened to me .

One noon I went to lunch at the cafeteria in the basement of our school. After entering the small restaurant, I went to the counter where the patrons were waiting in line to order their meals. Everyone followed one after another orderly. When my turn came, I suddenly found I had left my money at home. I was so embarrassed at that time that I didn't know what to do next.

I felt my heart beat violently and the people around the cafeteria seemed to be watching me. I had no choice but to pray that God would send somebody to deliver me from anxiety. All at once, one of my classmates appeared in front of me, believe it or not. It was very kind of her to help me pay for my food.

Oh! That was very embarrassing . Actually she is one of my best friends , and Thanks her very very much , she save me , really .

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  • 1 0 年前
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    Embarrassing things happened to everyone. Sometimes it could be funny, but most of time it is so embraced that I also felt ashamed. I am going to talk about my personal experience.

    One day I went to had lunch at the cafeteria in our school. After entering the small restaurant, I went to the counter where all the patrons were waiting in line to order get their meals; everyone just wait in line one after another. When I am in front of the cashier, I suddenly realize that I left my wallet at home. I was so embarrassed at that moment and I didn't know what to do.

    I felt my heart beat violently and the people around the cafeteria seemed to be watching me. I had no choice but to pray that God could send someone to help me. Just then, one of my classmates appeared in front of me and she helped me to pay for my meal.

    That was very embarrassing event. The person helped me out is one of my best friends, and thanks to her, she really saved my day.

    我把很多你的句子修改一下...

    我也不知道怎麼解釋,不過這樣看起來會比較順.

    盡量不要使用OH!這種字,

    還有也不要使用very very.

    試著換字用,像是extreme

    參考資料: 自已...
  • I think everyone must have had some embarrassing experiences. Sometimes it was very funny, but sometimes it was very very embarrassing.

    我不確定你是不是要說,每個人都依定發生過尷尬的事情。如果是的話,就是上面寫的那樣。

    至於下一段,可以整段刪除。因為英文不可以用And當句首,而且英文作文也不適合用這種方式寫。

    One noon, I had luch at cafeteria which is in the basement of our school. After entering the small restaurant, I went to the counter where the patrons were waiting on line to order their meals. Everybody followed one after one orderly. When my turn came, I suddenly found that I left my money home. I was so embarrassed at that time and I didn't know how to react.

    I felt my heart was beating so fast because all the people in the cafeteria seemed to watch at me. I had no choice but praying that God could send somebody to take me away from this anxious situation. All at once, my classmate appeared, believe it or not. It was very kind that she helped me to pay for my food.

    Oh! That was so embarrassing. Actually, she is one of my best friends, and I appreciate her very very much. She rescued me, really.

    我個人覺得rescue比save恰當一點,但是如果你覺得save比較好,你就用save囉。

    有些地方在英文上是不會這麼用的,但是文法上是對的,所以我就沒改了。

    參考資料: 自己
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