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Essay 的thesis statement急 救救我

我們之前交了文學概論的ESSAY

結果教授不滿意我寫的thesis statement

要我重寫 哀 我是大一新生真的還不太懂怎麼寫

我把我的第一段列出來和我們老師的評語

希望能幫我的救救我吧 我真的不知道要怎麼改

我的第一段--

Differences in Hayden’s “Those Winter Sundays” and Plath’s

“Daddy”

Both “Those Winter Sundays” by Robert Hayden and “Daddy” by Sylvia Plath are talking about the relationships between children and their father. Though there are many similarities between these two poems, there are still many differences behinds these similarities. Their unlikeness lies in the fact that their main ideas, conflicts, and tones are distinct. You can understand these distinctions by the following contents.

教授說的話

To compare the two poems and find out their differences is the subject you are dealing with, not your thesis statement. A thesis statement is to explain why you want to point out their differences—what objective do you wish to achieve by comparing them?

Please try again and write me by the end of this week a clear and specific thesis statement by using one sentence to summarize the idea that is controlling/dominate your comparison.

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請救救我

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  • 1 0 年前
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    辛苦您囉!...要寫一個深意度夠的Thesis statement 真的很不簡單!

    不過我有幾點建議您可參考看看:

    第一; 通常教授可能都會希望看到的是一個3D的thesis statement.

    3D的意思就是說 ...在您的Thesis statement 裡面必須要有以下這三部份: Why? How? What?

    切記切記! 不管寫什麼種類的文章的thesis statement 前 (在這個...是屬於comparative essay...因為您要比較 Plath 跟Hayden的作品),

    先問問自己三個問題:

    1. Why?: (這個問題是比較屬於interpretive) 舉例: 為什麼Plath 跟Hayden 要寫他們的作品? 用意何在? 在這篇呢, 您可能需要比較Plath跟Hayden的動機有什麼不同? 或是他們有什麼共同的動機 (寫作的動機)? 例如, 小紅帽的故事告訴我們要聽大人的話 (這個部份記住一定要有深義!!^^)

    2. How?: (這個部份也是比較屬於interpretive) 舉例: 這兩位作者 (Hauden 跟Plath) 在他們各自的作品裡 他們是如何傳送他們想要給讀者的訊息, 例如說藉由主角的死 (climax)來展現人類也有生老病死等等的. 切記:在這篇esssay 裡 您可能需要比較兩位作者方法的不同

    3. What?: (這個問題是比較屬於literal, fact) 這個部份就寫出

    作品名稱, 作者姓名 例如: 小說1984是George Orwell寫的

    第二; 記住 以後寫Thesis statement 的時候盡量用一句句子表達出來就好! 越簡潔明瞭越好!

    接下來 我們之接從您的Thesis statement來看看問題到底出在哪裡:

    Both "Those Winter Sundays" by Robert Hayden and "Daddy" by Sylvia Plath (這是what的部份) are talking about the relationships between children and their father. Though there are many similarities between these two poems, there are still many differences behinds these similarities. (這句可省略)Their unlikeness lies in the fact that their main ideas, conflicts, and tones are distinct.(問題來了, 兩篇poems到底是哪裡不懂?如何不同? 為什麼要不同??要更詳細一點) You can understand these distinctions by the following contents.

    2006-12-31 17:07:12 補充:

    PS: 3D的WHAT部分也包刮這個問題: 這兩篇文章是寫有關什麼?

    很抱歉 因為沒閱讀過Plath 跟Hayden的作品 所以給的資訊有限

    但是以後只要是寫thesis statement不妨試試3D!

    希望這些建議對您有幫助! 加油喔!! ^_^

    PS: 若需要更多建議的話 您可 email至: ya_job@hotmail.com

    2007-01-01 06:56:46 補充:

    PS: 抱歉 忘記跟您補充另一點

    那就是要記得 Thesis statement它不可以只是一則事實 是要一句您可以辯論的statement

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