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請幫我看看下面這段文法和標點符號有沒有問題&如果有太中式化的問題也幫我改改。謝謝

壓縮檔,比較好看 (friendship是原文,question是下面那段)

http://homelf.kimo.com.tw/tweety90331/question.rar

In my opinion, a true friendship is a beautiful and strong diamond. It is rare and hard to get it. People MUST learn how to cherish their friends! As the old saying goes, "A friend is not so soon gotten as lost!" In reality, it is not easy to find a true friend who would like to share your sadness and happiness. So far, my experiences about friendship have been very negative. They were not the "true" friendship! So goes the proverb, "True friendship harbors no selfishness." People cut off friendship too easily because of their advantages! "Julie", "Linda" and "Sheena", all these three were vey selfish, they made friends with other people on purpose and just for their own benefits. When their friends had no more benefit for them, then they would go away being relentlessly. From my bad experiences, I was afraid of having a friendship. It was nothing but a nightmare! On one occasion, I even wanted to segregate myself from the outside world. I was so scared to be hurt again. Nevertheless, I am now re-opening my mind to make friends with people, and always to be honest and sincere as who I am. I will be the one "a friend in need is a friend indeed." After all, I have learned that a true friend can be met but can not be requested. So from now on, I will treasure all the people I meet because maybe some or one of them will become my best true friends or friend in one day if I am truly blessed to have one or some. Meanwhile, I would like to tell people that please make friends with other people's with a sincere hearts. If you really can't, at least do not hurt other people's heart. And if you are lucky to have one or some, please do treasure him/her or them and always be there for him/her or them. At last, I wish we all will find our true friends or at least one in our life.

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    這個文章主要的問題是主題不清楚與組織混亂;句子跟句子似乎連貫不起來,且有點流水帳的感覺。文法還不錯。如果要問標點符號的話,我建議妳少用驚嘆號和全大寫 (e.g. "MUST")。

    In my opinion, aA true friendship is a beautiful and strong diamond;. It it is rare and hard to get it. People MUST learn how to is something worth cherishing their friends! As the old saying goes, "A friend is not so soon gotten as lost!" (看不懂,這個英文還是中文的 saying?) In reality, it is not easy to findFinding a true friend who would like to share is willing to share your sadness and happiness can be difficult. So far, my experiences about friendship have been very negative. They were not the "true" friendship! So goes the proverb, "True friendship harbors no selfishness." Too often, friendship is formed merely out of convenience, and Ppeople cut off friendship too easily because of for their advantages!. "Julie", "Linda" and "Sheena", all these three I have had friends who were vey selfish, they and made friends with other people for their own on purposes and just for their own benefits. When their friends had no more benefit for them, then they would go away being relentlessly. From My bad experiences with them hurt me greatly, I was afraid of having a friendship. It was nothing but a nightmare! At one time On one occasion, I even wanted to segregate myself from the outside world. I was so scared to be hurt again.

    Nevertheless, I am now re-opening my mind to make friends with people, and The experience taught me to be always to be honest and sincere as to who I am. I will be the one "a friend in need is a friend indeed." After all, I have learned that a true friend can be met but can not be requested. So from now on, I will treasure all the people I meet because maybe some or one of them they could one day will become my best true friends or friend in one day if I am truly blessed to have one or some. (字數限制,只能 answer 到這裡了)

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