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War and Peace

There is no denying that everyone tends to hope the world would be

peaceful forever. On the contray, there are still many wars breaking out in some countries. Why? Why people have to fight with each other?

I am always afflicted with this question, not knowing who can tell me the reason.

Peace is the most wonderful thing in the world. If we can live together with peace, there would be no fight on the earth. The more peace we

hold, the less war we have.

All in all, if we want the world go on with peace, we should forgive and spread your love to others.

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  • BABOO
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    1 0 年前
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    僅針對語法有問題的地方修正:

    On the contray, there are still many wars breaking out in some countries.

    這一句的On the contrary, 不合適,應該用However,

    Why? Why people have to fight with each other?

    這一句後面的問句是 Why do people have to fight with each other?

    既然是作文,就不應該用口語方式寫問句。

    I am always afflicted with this question, not knowing who can tell me the reason.

    這裡的tell me the reason 不好,應該改為 give me the answer.

    If we can live together with peace, there would be no fight on the earth.

    這一句修正為

    with peace 應改為 at peace :和平相處

    If we can live together at peace, there will be no fight on earth.

    使用假設語氣,前後時式要一致。另外 in the world = on earth.

    All in all, if we want the world go on with peace, we should forgive and spread your love to others.

    這一句也有修改的必要

    All in all, if we want the world to go on at peace, we should forgive others and spread our love to them.

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