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After watching myself on the stage and giving a speech to the audience; I realized I have a lot of problems need to improve. First, when I was on the stage, I was very nervous, so I low my voice down, that the audience could hardly hear what I said. Second, I did not fully memorize my speech, so I kept reading my note, which made my speech not flow enough. For that reason, I did not do well on eye contact with the audience, too. Also, I need to improve on my pronunciation because when I was watching the tape, I could hardly understand some word I pronounced. To the most important thing I need to improve is built up my confident more.

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  • Barb
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前
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    After watching myself on the stage and giving a speech to the audience, I realized I have a lot of weaknesses to improve. First, when I was on the stage, I was very nervous, so I lower my voice down, then the audience could hardly hear what I said. Second, I did not fully memorize my speech, so I kept reading my note, which made my speech not fluent (flow是動詞) enough. For that reason, I did not do well on eye contact with the audience, either. Furthermore, I need to improve (on刪除) my pronunciation because when I was watching the tape, I could hardly understand some word I pronounced. To the most important thing I need to improve is to build up my confidence more.

    大致上還算流暢,只有小地方有瑕疵,希望能幫到您。

    2007-02-06 15:23:32 補充:

    我用紅字更改,貼過來都變黑色了,麻煩自行對照一下

    參考資料: Myself
  • 向賢
    Lv 6
    1 0 年前

    After watching myself on the stage and giving a speech to the audience; (改逗點)I realized I have(改had) a lot of problems need(改needing) [to improve(to be improved或improving)]. First, when I was on the stage, I was very nervous, so I low(改為lower) my voice down, that(改為only to find that) the audience could hardly hear what I said. Second, I did not fully memorize my speech, so I kept reading my note, which made my speech not flow(not fluent) enough. For that reason, I did not do well on eye contact with the audience, too. Also, I needed to improve on my pronunciation because when I was watching the tape, I could hardly understand some words that I pronounced. [To the most important thing(The most important thing)] I need to improve is built(to build或build) up my confidence more.

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