Vivi 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

請幫我看已經寫好的英文短文(中翻英)是否合適

我高中時一向都是走路上學

I used to walk to school in senior high school.

學校離我家約一個小時的步行路程

It took me about an hour on foot from my house to school.

要到達學校,我必須穿越一座大公園,但那卻是最棒的一部分

I had to across a big park before I arrived the school, but it was the greatest part.

一進入公園,我就會找一個安靜的地方坐下來讀半個小時的英文

I would find a quiet place to sit and read English about half an hour after entering the park.

偶爾,我會抬頭看著樹上的鳥,聆聽他們的叫聲

Sometimes, I would raise my head and look at the birds on the tree, listening to their cheeping.

這樣的景象有助我整天保持好心情

This sight is helpful to keep me in a good mood all day.

那也是為什麼我每天都走路上學而不會感到厭煩的原因了

That is the reason why I walk to school every day but I never feel bored.

如果文法沒有特別錯的地方

請最好能不改就不改

因為我還是希望照自己的方式寫

如果有更好的句子也可提供我參考

請多注意時態的地方

謝謝大大的幫助摟

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    I used to walk to school when I was in senior high (school).

    The school was about an hour away from home on foot.

    To get to school, I had to cross a big park, but that was the best part of the whole journey.

    After entering the park, I would find a quiet place and read English for about half an hour. "After entering the park"放後面不行,會覺得它在修飾 "half an hour",也就是說,它成了 "進入公園半小時後"。

    Sometimes, I would raise my head to look at the birds on the trees and listen to their chirping. "cheep" 這字是說很尖銳的鳥叫聲。chirp 比較合適。

    The sight was helpful to keep me in a good mood all day.

    That was the reason why I walked to school every day and never felt bored.

    2007-02-08 21:03:59 補充:

    改成 Sometimes, I would look up the trees and listen to the chirping birds. 或Sometimes, I would look up to watch the birds on the trees and listen to their chirping.

    再者,這句是以 Sometimes 開頭,下一句又接 The sight was helpful…,那意思是說因為只有 sometimes 會抬頭看,並不是每一次都會心情好囉?所以建議再改成 The walk through the park was helpful…

    2007-02-14 22:33:07 補充:

    我是貼比較長的回答的那位,另外一位回答者說得沒錯(投票中,所以我也不曉得他是哪位),我的確忽略了 read English 這個錯誤。study English 才對。

  • 1 0 年前

    第4句忘了for= read English for about...

    English 加book或其他東ㄒ會比較通順.除非是要說study English.

    第5句 listen感覺怪怪.不過我不確定.希望其他大大幫忙囉

    因為是過去的事情最後2句要改過去式

    其他就是修辭上的問題比較多囉..

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