Fay 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

有請英文高手幫我改英文日記~^^

我想把英文學好,最近開始寫英文日記,但...我想寫了還是要知道哪裡有錯才會有進步吧~so請各位高手幫我訂正一下,看看我哪裡有錯須改的,因為是累積十天的份量,so有點多,不好意思,請你們儘量囉~如果可以的話,請告訴我錯在哪~還有為什麼要降改,如果不方便也沒關係,謝謝囉~

The mosquitoes

I hate the mosquitoes.

It's racketing around in my room last night.

I tried to kill the mosquitoes buzzing.

But it had a narrow squeak.

I suffered from a sleepy today.

New Year's Eve

Today is Chinese New Year's Eve.

All family has a yearly reunion dinner.

I was cleaned my room in the morning.

Although my room is small, I have many things to clean up.

So I spent lots of time to clean up.

Go to the KTV

KTV provide an amusement place.

My friend and I go to the KTV at midnight.

We spent five hours to sing songs.

Somebody were high on booze.

Everybody have a happy night.

Like a pig

New year is my sleep day.

I sleep everyday

I eat and drink to my heart's content.

I think I become a pig.

So I begin to lose my weight.

Friendship

Everyone need friendship.

Regardless of men or women, it is very important.

I am possessed of many good friends.

So I treasure our friendship.

I hope that we will be good.

No idea

I don't have any idea to keep my diary everyday.

I have a trouble.

I have achoke point.

I don't have any idea.

Oh~my God~Give me a opinion...

Depravity

Human being have a common failing, it's depravity.

The holidays corrupted me completely.

The backsliding will make you fail.

I abandon my lazy life.

I decided to make effort for my life.

P.S After four days.Hahaha...

Maintains my car

I maintain my car today.

I spent over four thousands dollars to maintain it.

I expended large sums of money in maintaining this car.

So I'm a pauper.

Because the car.

A new hairdo

I have a new hairdo today.

I went to a beauty salon for a permanent.

I wore my hair in a fringe.

My hair is different past of style.

I like it.

The travel

I want to travel by myself.

I have so many places to go not yet.

It's exhilarating to travel,

and widen my eyeshot.

I hope that I will have a travel this year.

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我沒有老師可以教,so才po上來請問各位高手的~^^

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哇~你寫的好詳細唷~

請問可以跟你要msn或即時通嗎?

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學到好多唷~

期待你的補充喲~

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  • 1 0 年前
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    The mosquitoes 這句對

    I hate the mosquitoes. 這句也對

    It's racketing around in my room last night. 你如果要說 它折磨我, 要說 *it tortured me...* 或者 *It drove me crazy*

    你這句要說的是 "它昨晚在我房間裡折磨我嗎?

    應該是 I was tortured by the mosquitoes in my room last night. ( 我昨天晚上被蚊子折磨)

    I tried to kill the mosquitoes buzzing. 你要說的是 我試著要殺那些翁翁叫的蚊子嗎? 應該說 I tried to kill those buzzing mosquitoes.

    But it had a narrow squeak. 這句真的看不懂..你要說的是* 被他們免強的逃走了嗎?* 如果是的話, 應該是 But they were lucky, they escaped succefully.

    I suffered from a sleepy today. 所以我今天就得忍受很想睡的一天??

    Therefore today I'm faint and sleepy.

    New Year’s Eve

    Today is Chinese New Year's Eve. 應改成 *The Chinese* 在說特定的國家或人的時候, 要加定冠詞 the

    All family has a yearly reunion dinner. 這句應該是說全家人在一起吃年夜飯吧? Therefore our family had a traditional New Year’s Eve dinner. ( Family reunion 指的是家庭聚會) All 後面接複數..但是你要說的是你全家(只有一個---你們家一個家庭)... 如果你要說的是全家人(有很多個...你家裡的每個人) 就要說 all fanily members

    I was cleaned my room in the morning. be動詞 was 加上 動詞的過去分詞 = 被動式 所以你不能用 I was cleaned (我被清乾淨了 ?)要用 I was cleaning( 我(表過去式)當時正在清理) 如果你要說房間被清乾淨了, 你會說 my room was cleaned 你如果要說 我今天早上正在清我的房間 你用特定式的*this morning* 會比用 沒有特定的 in the morning 還好, 還有, 時間副詞, 如果可以的話放在開頭...所以變成

    This morning I was cleaning my room.

    Although my room is small, I have many things to clean up.

    So I spent lots of time to clean up. lots of 改成 a lot of 比較好... lots of 後面比較適合接 複數可屬名詞.

    Go to the KTV 句子 不要用 *Go* 動詞原形當開頭...用 Going ( 動名詞V-ing 形式) 或 不定詞 ( To V 形式) 比較正統. 這裡的話 Going 又會比 To Go 更合適.

    KTV provide an amusement place. 你要說的應該是KTV 提共了休閑娛樂的空間吧? 休閑娛樂 用 entertainment 比較好 KTV provides entertainment.

    My friend and I go to the KTV at midnight. 這句寫的很好, 但是小小的錯誤....不能用 現在式 go 要用過去式 went. 因為這件事已經過去了

    We spent five hours to sing songs. 這裡用spent 就對了, 唱歌的話, 說 singing 就可以了 然後要改稱 We spent five hours singing.

    Somebody were high on booze. 應該是有人喝很多醉了吧? Somebody 後面要接單數.. 醉了叫做 drunk Somebody was drunk.

    Everybody have a happy night. (這裡Have要改成過去式)

    我要出去了 晚一點在幫你補充剩下的 : )

    2007-03-05 12:42:47 補充:

    Friendship

    Everyone need friendship. 中文說 每個人需要友誼.. 英文說需要朋友比較正確! Everyone 是單數的人稱代名詞 後面要接單數動詞 所以是*這一整句放在一起比較好...有連貫性. 順序也要改一下..用關係代名詞當開頭 所以整句是這樣

    It is very important that everyone needs a friend,regardless men or women.

    2007-03-05 12:43:03 補充:

    I am possessed of many good friends. 這樣寫沒有錯..但是平時不常用..用簡單的 I have many good friends就好了

    So I treasure our friendship.

    I hope that we will be good. 這樣說聽起來好像你們很壞所以要乖一點 = = 應該說 we will be friends forever.

    2007-03-05 12:44:55 補充:

    你給我你的Email 我直接寄給你..補充的話有限制字數!

    我的Email是 hummybear15@yahoo.com.tw 你可以直接寄給我

    參考資料: 我 托福550分
  • 匿名使用者
    7 年前

    我一直都有過敏狀況,是最近才知道要用防螨寢具的,因為醫師建議我用,我也考慮了很久,想說要買就買最好的,上個月趁網站有折扣的時候買了一組【北之特】防蹣(螨)寢具來用用看,真沒想到~~現在覺得過敏狀況有改善多了。雖然比一般的貴一些,不過~真值得!

  • 匿名使用者
    7 年前

    還是要去 http://aaashops.com/ 品質不錯,老婆很喜歡!

    哶儹咙伆勂

  • 1 0 年前

    樓上的人家就是不懂才問嘛,知識不都是不懂才問的咩

    而且還真的看的懂,不會看不懂,不懂的話就別來亂吧

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  • TGG
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    實在看不太懂妳在寫什麼! 首先是用字不當,其他是grammar.Though, you have a very good start on improving your English. Just need more practice. 妳可以請教學校的英文老師有關grammar的問題.

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