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主題是HOBBIES

Fashion and Auction

Yahoo Auction is my favorite website that I like to visit most in my free time. According to the 2006 survey by the TVBS (Television broadcasting satellite),it indicated that more than ten million people in Taiwan had purchased on the Internet. Clothes and make up are the main stuff that people like to buy. In other words, women are the main “on line buyer.” (I am no exception.)

When I was bored, I would spend three to four hours to surf Yahoo Auction rather than watch TV on the couch. There is much stuff and the price is cheaper than the shop, but most of them are second-handed. This Christmas, I bought an ivory white chinchilla coat, red corduroy miniskirts, and knee-high black boots for the party. They only cost me NT$3000 which makes me feel exciting the whole week. I also like to watch the photography of each item to learn how to match clothes. Like a knee-length skirt with open-toe scandals would make you look more attractive or a mini top tank with shorts and four inches stilettos would make you look sexier than usual.

This is my hobby, to learn and try every kind of clothes. But I am not the“blind follower.”Who only buy big brand such as Chanel, Louis Vuitton, or Calvin Klein. I can distinguish whether these dresses suit me or not and I will never ever become a fashion victim and I will keep my hobbies forever.

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    TVBS (Television broadcasting satellite)

    =TVBS (Television Broadcasting Satellite)

    it indicated that more than ten million people in Taiwan had purchased

    =more than ten million people in Taiwan had purchased something

    (前面已經有According to the survey...)

    Clothes and make up are the main stuff

    =Clothes and make-ups are the main items

    on line buyer

    =on-line buyers

    spend ... to surf ... than watch TV

    =spend ... surfing ... than watching TV

    (因為spend加Ving)

    There is much stuff and the price is cheaper than the shop

    =There are many things and the prices are cheaper than those in the shops

    second-handed

    = second-hand

    an ivory white chinchilla coat, red corduroy miniskirts, and knee-high black boots for the party.

    =an ivory white chinchilla coat, some red corduroy miniskirts, and a pair of knee-high black boots for a party.

    They only cost me NT$3000 which makes ...

    =They only cost me NT$3000, which made ...

    the photography of each item

    =the photograph (photo/picture) of every item

    Like a knee-length skirt with open-toe scandals would...

    =(Now I know) a knee-length skirt with open-toe sandals would...

    (scandal是醜聞)

    more attractive or a mini top tank ...

    =more attractive, and a mini top tank ...

    four inches stilettos

    =four-inch stilettos

    the blind follower

    =a blind follower

    ;Who only buy big brand such as

    =, who only buys name-brands such as

    I can distinguish whether these dresses suit me or not

    =I can tell whether an article suits me or not

    參考資料: myself
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