戴米 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

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AUTOBIOGRAPHY

My name is Demi, I was born and bred in Taiwan , seventeen years old, I lived in Taichung , there are six people in

my family,my father、mother、sister、younger brother and me . My parents use the democracy of the way to teach us since I was a child, they also hope we can independence and active learning, just can accumulate the life experience, but they will give encouragement and suggest in the right place in good time, the parents pay great attention to extremely regarding our schoolwork. As a person have to accumulate experience and some basic general knowledge, for warm up in the future.

I liked drawing since i was young, and in last summer vacation, i went to a Design Summer Camp hosted by University of Science and Technology Taipei,Taiwan. I join that because i want to know what i want,and in that five day, i learned a lot of things. like the design of merchandise or poster, but i finally find out that i"m interest in visual communication ,i know that is which i really want to learn and i think i can show my best in that!

My character is friendly, my interest is exercise and reads a book and listens to music. Whenever in a bad humor or pressure, I will make use of exercise to put aside, it is a very good way.

In the future, I believed oneself already leaves the goal not too far. Each people all have the potential, do not give up any opportunity, certainly must grasp well favor own opportunity, I wish to confront own goal volunteers to make great strides forward

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  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    只改一點點...不竟,有一點錯才正常。

    作得太完美會令人懷疑,質疑你的誠意及信心。

    .....but they will give us encouragements and suggestions in the right place at the right moment.

    experience and some basic, general knowledge, for warm up

    I joined that because i wanted to know what i want to do and what i want to be, and in that five day, i learned a lot of things, like the design of merchandise or poster, but i finally found out that im interest in visual communication ,i know this is which i really want to learn and i think i can show my best in this!

    My character is friendly, my interest is exercise and read books and listen to music. Whenever in a bad humor or pressure, I will make use of exercise to put aside, it is a very good way.

    In the future, I believe i won't be far away fromthe goal. Each people all have the potential, do not give up any opportunities, certainly must grasp well favor own opportunities, I wish to confront own goal volunteers to make great strides forward.

    2007-03-30 23:34:37 補充:

    my interest are doing some exercises, reading books and listening to themusic.

    *********made some mistakes...sorry....**********

    參考資料: basic knowledge
  • 1 0 年前

    你可以去下面那個部落格看看,他上面有發表很多自傳翻譯的文章和相關資料,還有許多英文學習相官,對你的翻譯應該滿有幫助!還有一些面談面試的要領,你都可以參考喔!你若有問題也可以發問或是留言!

    部落格網址:http://tw.myblog.yahoo.com/supercanada2007/archive...

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    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    My name is Demi、I am an seventeen- year- old girl who grew up in Taiwan 、I live in Taichung 、there are six people in

    my family,my father、mother、sister、younger brother and me . My parents have used the way of the democracy to teach us since I was a child.

    they also hope we can be more independent and be more active to learning、just can accumulate the life experience、but they will give us encouragements and suggestions in the right place in the right time.The parents pay great attention to extremely regarding our schoolwork. As a person has to accumulate experience and some basic general knowledge、for warming up in the future.

    I have been fond of drawing since i was young、and in last summer vacation、i went to a Design Summer Camp hosted by University of Science and Technology Taipei,Taiwan. I joined that because i wanted to know what i want,and in that five days、i learned a lot of things. like the design of merchandise or poster、but i finally find out that i"m interested in visual communication ,i know that is which i really want to learn and i think i can do my best in that!

    My character is friendly、my hobby is exercise、reading a book and listening to music. Whenever in a bad mood or pressure、I will make exercise to relax、it is a very good way.

    In the future、I believe oneself that I will achieve the goal someday. Each one has the potential、do not give up any opportunity、certainly must grasp each opportunities that is helpful to us、I wish to confront my own goal and to volunteer to make great strides forward.

    不知道有沒有接近你的原意

    2007-03-23 21:38:19 補充:

    不好意思,這兩句修正如下:

    I am a seventeen- year- old girl who grew up in Taiwan.

    I believe myself that I will achieve the goal someday.

    2007-03-23 21:41:20 補充:

    剛忘了把 grow 改過來

    I am a seventeen- year- old girl who grow up in Taiwan. 這樣才對!

    參考資料: 自已, 自己
  • 1 0 年前

    我只看了第一段

    我覺ㄉ

    1.年紀放在你的名字後面比較好

    還有

    2.二三句我覺ㄉ可以合併

    →I was borned and lived in Taichung.

    3.My parents use the democracy of the way to teach us since I was a child, they also hope we can independence and active learning

    →My parents are democratic. They hoped(使用過去式)~and learned actively.

    4.很多都是完整的句子,要將兩個完整的句子連接要用","或", and"不然就直接用句號結束

    我是覺ㄉ

    自傳不要寫太冗長,文法也不用太多

    看的懂就好

    免得自曝其短反而讓看的人留下不好印象

    參考資料: 我自己
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