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英文作文the most impressive thing

unforgtable, my first job-interview experience.

it is necessary to prepared something, before you have an interview with

someone. because they will ask you some question , such as your education , your work experience and your future goal. if you could not answer that, you will feel embrazzing.

i kept a good memory of thar. everytime i have a job interview, i always take easy and relax to answer all the questiion, until i met a serious boss. first she asked me some weird question and i do not how to answer that, then she is not polite to insulted me to tell the next person into her office.

i think that she does not like me for no reason.

我要參加英檢中級的複試 但我的英文都寫的很淺顯易懂 請問一下 我有哪些地方寫錯或寫不好嗎

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  • 1 0 年前
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    The unforgetable first-job interview. 或是 The unforgetable experience of my first-job interview. [first-job 以-加起來才能成為形容詞, 後面接名詞]

    It is necessary to be well prepared, before having an interview with someone. [something, somone總是不明確, 文具中已明確的標示比較好, 所以我這裡幫你改成 be well prepared 代表作萬全準備之意]

    Because they will ask you some questions, such as the education, work experiences and future goal. [question記得是複數, 作文中儘量不要寫到 你 或 你的, 很沒有禮貌, 盡量用客觀描述, 故把your去掉, 改the, 還有and 用法中間只要用, 連接, 不需要用and]

    If you could not answer that fluently, you will feel embarrassed. [通常面試多少都會回答, 應該說沒有回答的很流暢的話, 所以幫你修了一下, embarrassed 記得加ed變成形容詞]

    I keep a good memory of that. [keep應為現在式, 不是說你之前記得以後就不記得, 所以不能用過去式]

    Every time I have a job interview, I always force myself to relax and answer all the questions, until I met a serious boss. [every time才是副詞, 你的take easy感覺有點輕挑, 所以改成強迫自己放輕鬆會比較好, question記得加 s]

    First, she asked me some weird questions and I don't know how to answer that. [first後記得加 "," question記得加 s, know少打了]

    Then, she impolitely insulted me to the next person in her office. [直接說不禮貌的侮辱就可以了, 不要把話拖的太長, 會沒有力道, 不用to tell因為用insult to sb.就可以了, into 改成 in, into用在前面有行走的動詞才用, 如get into, run into...]

    I think that she just doesn't like me for no reason. [用just來強調語氣]

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    常會有忘了加 s 的情況出現, 句首及 I 都要大寫喔~~

    另外這篇作文看起來有點短, 最後好像沒有結論, 雖然這是你個人經歷問題, 不過主考官都會比較喜歡看到正面的東西喔~~~

    比如說你發現你有哪些地方可以改進之類的, 可以以此做 ending

    參考資料: 英文研究所生
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  • 1 0 年前

    The unforgettable(字尾重複t,unforgettable是形容詞不可單獨用於自首) experience that is my first job-interview.

    It is necessary to prepared something, before you have an interview with someone. Because. They will ask you some questions(Some後面加複數名詞), such as your education, your work experience ,(A, B, and, C)and your future goal. If you could not answer that, you will feel embarrassed(感到不好意思用ed).

    I kept a good memory of that. Every time(everytime是形容詞,分開是副詞) I have a job interview, I always take easy and relax to answer all the questions(Some後面加複數名詞) until I met a serious boss. First,(首先加逗號→副詞) she asked me some weird questions and I do not know how to answer it. Then, (副詞加逗號)she is not polite to insult (to後面加原形動詞)me to tell the next person into her office.

    I think that she does not like me at all(這裡用at all 就可以了).

    寫錯的如上,加強英文的文法,在寫作上面會比較有幫助,剛開始的時候,試著寫簡單句型就可以了,文法熟練後再練習比較難的句子。寫作要注意的地方還有,頭尾呼應。第一句的主題句和你的結尾句要相呼應,為什麼讓你難忘。

    希望這些對你有幫助^^加油

    參考資料: 應外系兼家教
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