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How to get along with others

People can't live without others.Hense, the relationship becomes a

important issue to discuss.The person who can be liked by crowd that

is because of his kind behavior 、 good attitute and sincere.For

example, speaking to the one who always with smile and think for

others that make us feel delight so that want to contact with him farther.

On the contrary, if the body who's conduct is rough、discourteous or

just think for own.We don't want to get in touch with them.However,

kind and honestare two point. "Do not do to others what you don't want

to done to you" is also a tip to follow.They are help you to develop your

relationship.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    How to get along with others

    People can't live without others, therefore, the relationship between people becomes an important issue to discuss. Person who liked by crowd is often because of his kindness, good attitude and sincereness. For example, we would prefer to befriended people who always smile and think for others.

    On the other hand, we definitely would not want to talk to people who is rude and selfish.

    "Do not do things that you wouldn't want to be done to you to others"

    is also a tip to follow, it helps you to develop yourself into a person who would be liked by others.

    痾....看的時候倒是還好,修改的時候發現問題很多:

    1)relationship 的意思是人際關係,在中文可以直接講"人際關係變成我們一個重要的討論話題",可是英文如果要講,就必須是relationship between people.

    2)還有寫文章的時候要想好,要有建設性,前面那段"The person who can be liked by crowd that is because of his kind ..."得Because 指的是"因為","因為"是個已經非常確定的字,可是你怎麼確定每一個被喜歡的人都人很好,很真誠?所以這時候用often (通常)或likely(比較有可能) 比較適當噢。還有that is because 那邊不太順。

    3)because of his kind behavior 、 good attitute(attitude) and sincere那邊,his得後面不能放動詞,必須放名詞噢。(英文裡,頓號就是逗點啦)

    4)For example, speaking to the one who always with smile and think for others that make us feel delight so that want to contact with him farther 這句知道你在講什麼,可是不怎麼順噢。

    5)On the contrary, (這句很怪,扣分了)if the body(在這裡body變成了身體的意思,最好用person) who's conduct is rough、discourteous or

    just think for own.(rough是粗操的意思,不可以用來形容人!just think for own 應該是just think for their own,而且這句話就是要講自私嘛,自私的英文是selfish)We don't want to get in touch with them.(這句知道什麼意思,不過整個很不順)However, kind and honestare two point. (這句是什麼意思?整個很怪異)

    "Do not do to others what you don't want to done to you" is also a tip to follow.(這句OK,不過don’t want to BE done to you”)They are help you to develop your relationship. (一句話而已,哪來的they?relationship 剛剛講過了。後面很怪)

    英文還有超級無敵多進步空間,加油辣!

    有啥問題可以去這裡問噢:

    http://www.wretch.cc/blog/jennifernung

    (請找裡面的"香儂"噢!小六生)

    參考資料: 我自己阿
  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前

    People can't live without others; therefore, the relationship becomes an important issue to discuss. The person who can get along with each others is because of his kind behavior, good attitude and sincere. For example, speaking to the one who always has a smile on and always think about others makes us feel delight, so we want to contact with him. On the contrary, if the person whose behavior is rough, discourteous and selfish, we don't want to get to know them. However, kind and honest are the most important ways to treat other people. "Do not do anything that you don’t want other people does to you" is also a tip to follow. It helps you to develop your relationship with others.

    沒有什麼比較大的問題,只是句子有些很不順

    參考資料: me
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