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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

拜託英文好的大,幫我改改英文自傳

I am XX Lai, I am seventeen years old, and I live in Hualien. My family is composed by four members, my parents, an older brother and me. My elder brother always help me when I came up problem, he was also my good senior.

Father is a train driver who has worked for Taiwan Railway Administration, his attitude that give priority to passengers is my honor and also I have to learn. Mother is enlightened and optimistic , she often encourage me to make my decision.

My parents had asked me to save since I was in the second grade of elementary. So, I had the habit when I was a child. But, It’s not good enough to use money by this way. I want to get more efficient skills and want to take more challenges, so I made a decision to Dong Hwa University.

My favorite recreational activity is “Break Dance”. Maybe I has learned electric piano since I was five-year-old. So, I am sensitive to music when I heard some songs. “Break dance” make me become more confident before I didn’t Learn it, and let me make broad kinds of friends easily. But I didn’t ignore my study when I participate in this activity, I strike a balance between learning and relaxation.

Today, some people don’t know how to control their desire for clothes, jewelry, cars. They just squanter their money ,and their desire lead them to bankrupt. Having this mind, I would like to majoy in finance. I hope the professional training in Dong Hwa Department of Finance can make me a person who has ability and moral.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    My name is XX Lai, a severnteen years-old boy. There are 4 persons in my family, my parents, elder brother and myself. My elder brother always helps me to solve any kind of problems. He is also my good master.

    Father is a train driver who has worked for Taiwan Railway Administration, his attitude in offering the priorities to passengers is my honor and also I have to learn. Mother is enlightened and optimistic, she encourages me a lot and help me to make decision.

    My parents had asked me to save money since I was in the second grade of elementary. So, I had the habit when I was a child. But, it’s not good enough to use money by this way.?? But it is not enough to accumulate my fortune by just saving money. I want to be more professional and adventuristic, so I joined Dong Hwa University.

    My favorite recreational activity is “Break-Dance". I am very good at all kinds of music maybe it was because I had learned electric piano since I was five. I feel very confident when I play“Break-dance", I can easily make varieties of friends. But I didn’t ignore my study when I participate in this activity, I can leverage it between studying and relaxating.

    Today, some people don’t know how to control their desire in clothes, jewelry, cars, etc. They just squanter of their money, and it easily lead them toward bankruptcy. By having this in mind, I would like to major in Finance. I hope the professional training in Dong Hwa Department of Finance can make me a person who has ability and moral.

    2007-04-08 18:38:08 補充:

    sorry.. 有些打字錯誤...

    seventeen....

    relaxing... (not relaxating)

    參考資料: 加油喔... **^^**
  • 匿名使用者
    6 年前

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