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MyBaby 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

英文的自我介紹

My name is Jack,I am a student. I live in Kaohsiung,it is really a beautiful city.

There are four people in my family.Everybody is happy together.

When I have a free time,I usually read books that is good for my lessons (studies), I also Reads the novel just for relax.

I am good at singing,playing baseball.

I hope I will go around the world to see the different countries and culture someday.

Also,I hope I could work as a teacher in the future,so that I could bequeath the knowledge to more people.

這是我的自我介紹 請問大大哪裡有錯

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  • Lisa
    Lv 6
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    My name is Jack, I am a student.

    -->My name is Jack. I am a student.

    (應該分成兩個句子)

    I live in Kaohsiung, it is really a beautiful city.

    --->I live in Kaohsiung which is a very beautiful city.

    (把兩個句子連成一句,並仔細形容)

    There are four people in my family.

    --->不變

    Everybody is happy together.

    --->We are a happy family.

    (換句話說,您可能直接用中文翻成英文,所以不太通)

    When I have a free time, I usually read books that is good for my lessons (studies), I also Reads the novel just for relax.

    --->I usually read books when I have free time. Reading books is good for my studies. Besides this, I read novels to relax myself.

    (把一大段的話,分成三句,這樣子比較容易理解)

    I am good at singing,playing baseball.

    --->I am good at sining and playing baseball.

    (少了連接詞,因為性質相同,所以可以一起說)

    I hope I will go around the world to see the different countries and someday.

    --->I want to travel around the world to visit different countries and cultures someday.

    (改成---想要去參觀各個國家和不同的文化,會較優美些)

    Also,I hope I could work as a teacher in the future,so that I could bequeath the knowledge to more people.

    --->Moreover, I want to be a teacher in the future to bequeath my knowledge to everyone.

    (不用also,改用moreover,表示---更進一步,會較強烈些)

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  • 1 0 年前

    My name is Jack,I am a student. I live in Kaohsiung (and) this is a really beautiful city.

    There are four people in my family.(we are) happy together.

    When I have (不用a) free time,I usually read books. That is good for my lessons (studies), I also read(不用s) the novel for relax.

    I am good at singing (and)playing baseball.

    I hope (that) I (can travel) around the world to see the different countries and cultur(ies) someday.

    Also,I hope (that) I could (be) a teacher in the future,so that I could bequeath the knowledge to more people.

    參考資料: 自己
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