這是我的英文自傳~可以幫我改一下嗎 ??

PS:改的人請仔細~拜託啦~這是我簡短的自我介紹~麻煩請把我糾正錯誤,感謝你們!! Hello!你好! My name is xxx. 我的名子是xxx。 My family lives on the Taibei county . 我家住在台北縣上。 I am nineteen years old. 我今年19歲。 My height 179 centimeters, body weight 88 kilograms. 我的身高179公分,體重88公斤。 I am an extremely energetic boy.我是一個非常精力充沛的男孩。 I at present go study the... 顯示更多 PS:改的人請仔細~拜託啦~這是我簡短的自我介紹~麻煩請把我糾正錯誤,感謝你們!!

Hello!你好!
My name is xxx. 我的名子是xxx。
My family lives on the Taibei county .
我家住在台北縣上。
I am nineteen years old. 我今年19歲。
My height 179 centimeters, body weight 88 kilograms.
我的身高179公分,體重88公斤。
I am an extremely energetic boy.我是一個非常精力充沛的男孩。
I at present go study the Southern China high school at night three grade, I study the branch department is the material place science subjects, graduates in this June.
我目前就讀南華高中夜間部三年級,我所學的科系是資料處理科,將在今年六月畢業。
My interest is reading and plays the basketball, reading may learn the knowledge
which in the textbook studies does not arrive, increases own self-control, plays the basketball to be allowed the strong body and spirit, may understand the association cooperation the importance.
我的興趣是閱讀及打籃球,閱讀可以學到課本中學習不到的知識,增加自身涵養,打籃球可以強健體魄,更可以從中了解到團體合作的重要性。
This work lets me harvest many, studies very many things.
這份工作讓我收穫不少,學習到很多東西。
Because our shopkeeper is fastidious very much to the life manner,deeply deeply has affected me, enable me to have the manner to the matter which today matter today finishes.
由於我們店長對生活態度很講究,深深地影響了我,使我對事情有著今日事今日畢的態度。
In the future, I will have to display this kind of spirit in mine work.
在未來,我要發揮這種精神在我的工作上。
If very luckily could enter your firm to work as data processing engineer, I certainly can concentrate this work, did not let initially enroll me you to be disappointed.
如果很幸運地能進入貴公司當資料處理工程師,我一定會專注於這份工作,不讓當初錄取我的你失望。
Above is my brief self introduction, thank you listening respectfully! !
以上是我簡短的自我介紹,謝謝你的聆聽!!
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