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學生林 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

我的英文作文..高手幫我改一下

The most beautiful memory in my mind is to become an English good learner. Althouth it just a dream , but I promise myself work hard to fullfilled it.

At begining , I am not excellened in English , getting bad grade in every English test . But I make up my mind to spend more time practicing English , I read English artice and listen to English programs every day . I whileheartedly studied in English and efforts pay off . I make great progress in English , but I cun find room for improvement in my English .

In sum , with firmly resolution and non-stop perseverance attitude in English , I believe I will have my beautiful dream come ture in someday.

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  • 匿名使用者
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    1.The most beautiful memory in my mind is to become an English good learner. →我覺得memory 在這裡用來看起來很怪,因為你明明是敘述未來的事情,to become an English good learner也用的不好

    建議改為The most beautiful image about my future in my mind is to

    have a good command in English.<精通英文>

    2.

    拼字錯誤,promise 後不可直接加另一動詞 要加子句<也就是that 後加主詞加動詞構成另一句子>

    Although it just a dream , but I promise myself that I will work hard to

    fulfilled it.

    3.一個句子最基本的結構"主詞加動詞"千萬不可一次出現兩個動詞<要用連接詞>句子該分開就要分開。句與句之間善用連接詞

    At the begining , I am not excellent in English and get bad grades in

    every English test . But I make up my mind to spend more time

    practicing English .For example, I read English articles and listen to English programs every day .

    4.這句前後句意怪怪的 我想你應該是這個意思

    After studying hard in English,my efforts finally paid off . I make

    great progress in English . However, I don't know how to pefect my

    English competance further.

    5. To sum up , with my firm resolution and everlasting perseverance

    in English , I believe I will have my beautiful dream come ture in some

    day.

    建議

    英文作文中"連接詞"非常重要

    上下語氣轉折或更進一步說明都會用到

    建議你可以試著放不同的連接詞進去

    2007-04-14 01:24:14 補充:

    我沒打上所有說明

    如果我改掉的地方有什麼覺得奇怪的再問囉

    2007-04-14 01:25:13 補充:

    2. Although it "is" just a dream

    2007-04-14 01:26:44 補充:

    5.in some day. 直接someday 當副詞用即可

    參考資料: me
  • 星星
    Lv 6
    1 0 年前

    ...an English good learner 應改為 a good English learner. 或 is to learn good English.

    Althouth拼錯了...Although

    I am not excellened in English 這句簡單一點 改為 I'm not good in English

    English artice...English article

    I whileheartedly studied in English...這邊看不懂

    but I cun find...應改為 ...but I still can find room for improvement in my English.

    In sum 改為 Finally, ...

    I believe I will have my beautiful .... 應改為 I believe I will have my dream come ture someday.

    希望對你有幫助

    參考資料: 自己
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