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The Violence

The violence is a very serious problem and we have to prevent it get worse. According to Dictionary, violence is a "violent behavior that is intended to hurt or kill somebody," but there is no perfectly way to solve this kind of problems. There are some reasons to cause violence. First of all, it's legal to buy a gun on several places and it's easy to get one on internet against the law. Unfortunately, people survive in this situation which is in dangerous. Thus, there are lots movies on TV which fill with violent and sanguineous. And people learn how to crime through the kind of films. The other way to get criminal information is by internet. It has plenty knowledge about how to fabricate a weapon, injure the people and make commotions. However, those mediums destroy our mentality and no doubt we have to restrain those which diffuse crimes. Beside, we have to improve our education of moral which couldn't solve the problem by violence. Against brute force not only guard by government but also people have to pay more attention to the condition of our future.

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    The Violence problem in today’s society

    The violence problem in today’s society is getting more serious than before. It is a must for people to prevent it from getting worse. According to XXX Dictionary(這裡請點出是哪本Dictionary), violence is a "violent behavior that is intended to hurt or kill somebody.(這裡請標上頁數)" But in my opinion, there is no perfect way to solve this problem thoroughly. There are various reasons that might cause human violent behaviors. First of all, it's the long controversial issue of gun control problem in society. Take U.S. for example, such a troubled individual as Cho Seung-Hui at Virginia Tech. tragedy could obtain guns legitimately. Not to mention the illegal access to lethal weapons in underworld. Unfortunately, people have to live under such dangerous conditions. Besides, there are lots of movies or TV programs fill with violent and sanguineous plots. In some way, people could learn criminal matters through these kinds of films. Furthermore, People get violent information easily through internet about how to fabricate weapons, injure people and make commotions in society. The media could deteriorate people’s mentality in many ways. We have to restrain those negative factors which might diffuse crimes. Besides, we have to improve the moral education in students not to appeal to violence when they have dispute with others. Not only should government pay more concern to reduce the violence problem in future, but people have to learn to protect themselves from violence in their surroundings.

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