Kevin 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

英文作文改錯。關於邀請信寫法。

可以幫我改錯嗎?如果有錯的話,或是使文意更通順。謝謝。

This world was full of many bad guys, so I must change my msn account.

This account has been used for a long time.

You can find me by this msn account:xxxxx@gmail.com.tw

If you treat me as your friend, please join it.

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    我先試著說一下我覺得有問題的地方,說得不對的話也請多包涵。^^

    # This world was full of many bad guys, so I must change my msn account.

    This world is... 應該用現在式,因為就算換了帳號還是一樣多bad guys啊。

    # This account has been used for a long time.

    這句有點亂入,會讓人不知道是在講新帳號還是舊帳號。

    # You can find me by this msn account:xxxxx@gmail.com.tw

    還OK,不過似乎用...reach me at...較佳;另外,Gmail沒有.tw。

    # If you treat me as your friend, please join it.

    join這字用得不太對,join的「加入」比較像是(人)加入某個組織;而把某東西加入另一東西的「加入」要用add。

    I'm writing to tell you that because of account hijack, I've decided to change my msn account to xxxxx@gmail.com although the original one has been used for a long time. Therefore, please add my above new account into your msn contact list if you treat me as your friend and still want to chat with me.

  • 1 0 年前

    首先 This world was full of many bad guys 是中式說法吧,已經full of了,再用many是畫蛇添足吧! 其實只要簡單的說: I would like to change my msn contact address because of some reasons. The new address is XXX@gmail.com. Please add me into your contact list if I am still your friend ^_^ Hope can chat with you soon. 這樣簡單又明瞭喔

  • 1 0 年前

    I changed my msn account because too many annoyed people in my list. I been using this acoount for a long time. You can find me with this new account which is xxxxx@gmail.com.tw. Please add me if you still treat me as your friend.

    參考資料: me
  • 1 0 年前

    My msn account that I've been using for a long time was embezzled by

    someone. So I had to change my account.

    Now, you can find me by this msn account:xxxxx@gmail.com.tw

    Please add me if you take me as your friend!

    *~ 我覺得這樣比較順。 翻不好, 請包含啊~ *

    參考資料: mememe
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