有關兩篇英文短文的問題(20點)

請幫我看看這兩篇英文短文有無需修改的地方,如文法、單字的錯誤等。

My Day

Today is a really unlucky day for me. I woke up and found out it

was 8:50am already(I usually get up earlier).When I enter the

classroom,it was 9:20am.It could be fine essentially,but the teacher

was call the roll,so properly,i was be late.

I was ready to go to class when I found out I didn't bring my

textbook, since I was in a hurry this morning.I even forgot there is a test

today, and my friend gave me a lecture on my excursive live way.

Then I was absent-minded when I walked in school all time, I

bumped my head against the shelf in library,and fell over because of

tripped by a branchlet when I walk in the sideway.As a result, I've got my

knee all scratched, dirt all over my cloth.

It started to rain cats and dogs when I was decide going to the

dormitory and I didn't bring an umbrella with me,so I was exposed in the rain untill I enter the dormitory.

Today is an really unlucky day.

My Brother Jack Is A Very Generous Person

My younger brother Jack is a very generous person,and he also is a friendly、funny、talkative guy,the only fly in the ointment is he did'n hardworking,even lazy.

Anybody can talk with he ver easy,and soon,you will find out that he

is very funny,he always can tell a lot of joke,and made everyone laugh.

so i think he is really a funny guy.My younger is average height and

weight,could be say strong,but not fat.He has shortly and black straight

hair.

He is very like exercise,like jog、bicycle、basketball、valleyball,all

are his favorite.In his freetime,he always like doing these sport,and even

these exercise look very tough in other peope’s point,but he really

enjoy it..

He is also interest in watch movie,special like action、comedy,and if you talk about movie,he can gushing like the oil from the well.

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mmmmuh.....不是要別人幫我重寫一遍啦,只是想請大家幫我看看單字、文法有沒有錯,有沒有唸起來會不順不通的地方,並給我建議改成怎樣比較好。

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    My (Unlucky) Day

    Today is my unlucky day.

    First. I woke up late at 8:50am (I usually get up much earlier). When I enter the classroom, it was 9:20am. Normally it would be fine, however, the teacher has already took the roll call and I was late. When I opened my backpack, I found out when I hurried out of my home, I forgot to bring my textbook. But that's not the only thing I forgot. I also forgot that we have a test today, and [my friend gave me a lecture on my excursive live way這句看沒有].

    With my absent-minded self walked around the school, I bumped my head against the library shelf, tripped over tree roots in the sidewalk, scratched my knee and dirtied my clothes all over. And when I decided to go back to my dorm, it started to rain dogs and cats. And of course, I didn't have an umbrella with me. When I entered the dorm, I was wet all over.

    Today is really my unlucky day.

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    (I stopped here because I believe the new version is too good for ur homework and your teacher will not believe you did it yourself. ---> That's would be another unlucky thing for your. Right?)

    2007-06-24 06:04:11 補充:

    change "live way" to "life style"

    2007-06-24 23:33:27 補充:

    It seem like you r still sincere. OK, just rewrite it urself for ur homework. When I have time (in a few days maybe), I'll correct ur other article. To be honest, it is much worse then the first one. But I'll do it on ur other post (to earn another 20 points from u. hahahaha..........)

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