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急!!!有沒有英文高手幫我檢查我的文章文法是否正確!!

請大家幫我核對我的英文是否有文法上的錯誤

我趕著要寫信給美國的教授

我很急著要,請大家踴躍幫忙我!

先謝謝大家了!!

內容如下:

Hello professor ××× :

My name is ×××, you can call me Annie. I come from Taiwan. I'm 21 years old. Now I study in ×× University of Music. My major is flute, and minor are piano and piccolo. This choice is selecting by me.

This year, I will apply to music of master .Because I think that it have many interest courses, which I want to learn in this territory. I have a strong interest to Flute. The dream I have that from past to now be always to study abroad to America, experience the American culture and music.

To fulfill this goal, I am in additional learning school teaches Music scope. I will also read some extracurricular flute books and attend some Music competitions. So I wish I can continue to go toward this road of music to stand down. In conclusion, I am a energetic, positive and optimistic student. Thank you for your reading and I hope thereafter you can understand me more.

I very admire you. I hope that I can become your student in future. Do I have opportunity? What method? Can you give me some suggests? But I can't go to scene examination. Just send my CD.

Thank you!

Annie

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補充最末段想要翻譯的內容:

非常仰慕教授的大名,你在長笛界很優秀之外,在長笛的教學上更是認真,學生能從你的身上學到很多,我希望有機會可以成為你的學生,不知道有什麼方式?可否給我一些建議?

我不能夠去美國現場考試,只能用寄錄音的方式,是否會影響錄取?貴校是否非常重視托福成績,還是只是ㄧ個門檻?希望教授可以給我答覆。

以後有申請上的問題,是否可以寫信詢問教授?

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  • jinlin
    Lv 4
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    很高興能分享 希望可以幫到你!!

    Respectable Professor:

    I 'm xxx from Taiwan, you can call me Annie for short. I'm presently

    21 years old and currently a student of xxx University taking up Music.

    I'm majoring in Flute with piano and piccolo as minors at the same time.

    The interest in music urges me to take up master's degree for further

    enhancement and in this way, I can get more acquainted to other courses

    related to music. However, to pursue study abroad has been always

    my dream especially if I would be able to go to the United States .

    Aside from being energetic and optimistic, I 'm also enthisiastic .

    I'm not only a teacher in Music couse in a training school , I also

    read other related informations and reading materials in my spare time .

    Music competitions are also places where I go as well.

    Your famous name in the world of flute admires me and your dedicaton

    in this field as well. I hope that I can have the opportunity to be your

    student. Please advice me regarding this matter. And since I can't

    personally attend the examination I would like to send a CD as substitute,

    will this affect my admission? How about TOEFL? Please let me know.

    In the future. if I encounter any problems with my application, Can I

    have the privelege to make any further understanding with you?

    Thank you very much .

    Annie

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  • Pirate
    Lv 5
    1 0 年前

    寫信給教授,請不要用Hello, 用Dear Professor xxx較好,因為這不是平常在校園遇到,要asatsu的场合。

    的確如上面另一個翻譯者所言,你的英文句子有一些不清楚的地方,可能是受到本國語言的干擾,你可否將原信以中文呈現,我樂於幫你翻譯。因為我怕你寄這樣的信給美國教授,你的音樂之夢會破滅,那我也會替你難過。

    2007-07-29 01:32:02 補充:

    我的email 地址是

    natsukous@pchome.com.tw

    2007-07-29 01:36:21 補充:

    無料(免費) 翻譯,預祝你研修音樂之路順暢,加油。

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  • 1 0 年前

    我試試看< 因為讀了一下你的原文, 有些地方不太懂你要表達的意思, 若離題了, 請見諒囉

    Good day, Professor ××× :

    My name is ××× or Annie. I'm from Taiwan and 21 years old. I am energetic, positive and optimistic. Currently I am a student in Music Dept of ×× University. My major is Flute, and two other minors are piano and piccolo.

    This year, I'd like to apply for higher degree in Music because there are more attracting and interesting courses which I eager to learn in this field. I feel enthusiastic when it comes to Flute. I am taking additional courses in teaching Music scope. Beside school studies, I also read extracurricular flute books and attend more Music competitions. Turning myself into professional in music has been my dream and I certainly believe studying abroad in the United States would be the key toward that dream.

    I'd like to take this opportunity not only to introduce myself and my purpose of this letter, but also more important is to receive your approval whether I am qualified for studying at your school or not.

    I do respect any of your opinions and hope that I will become one of your students in near future. Unfortunately I am not able to take any interview in person at this moment but I am sending my CD with this letter. I am confident to say that no regret will come after your positive decision. Please accept my many thanks for everything.

    I am looking forward to the opportunity of the admittance

    Yours sincerely,

    Annie

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