匿名使用者
匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

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The concept of this women’s clothing flagship store is trying to create a noble and elegant atmosphere to match with the high quality merchandises. The store will raise the ceiling height up to the twelve feet, which helps the store looks spaciousness and also helps customers feel relax during the shopping. The door is going to be a transparency door with a golden curved line handle. The white Carrara marble with gray stripe will cover the whole floor to increase the magnificent atmosphere. After walk into the store there will be a huge crystal ceiling lamp hanging up at the middle of the store. The warm-tone light from the ceiling lamp illuminated the dark brown mahogany wall and cash counter, creates the contrast to the white floor and ceiling. The cash counter will locate at the middle right of the store; it is easily for salesperson to look after customers. The store’s logo will combine the store’s name with butterflies and flowers. It will shows not only at storefront but also the wall after the cash counter. The storefront will made by floor to ceiling windows, which is easily for people to see through the store The three fitting rooms located at back of the store will be made by the mahogany and silver. The amethyst velvet curtain covered by the pink silk will instead of fitting room doors. The combination of amethyst and pink colour lowers down the solemn feeling caused by the strong contrast of dark brown and white, it also increases the feeling of elegant and tasteful.

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  • meta
    Lv 6
    1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    先問一下

    你們教授是外國人還台灣人?

    = =

    如果是老外那我先給你依個基本忠實的建議,你每一個句子都太長了

    比方第一句

    The concept of this women’s clothing flagship store is trying to create a noble and elegant atmosphere to match with the high quality merchandises

    改成

    The concept of this women’s clothing flagship store is trying to create

    gradually.

    A noble and elegant atmosphere to match with the high quality merchandises.

    外國教授不喜歡太長的句子,老外也習慣精簡一點的文彙

    另外我要補充一點

    ^^"不好意思我不會很喜歡回答匿名者的問題,匿名的感覺都很沒有誠意

    所以我先跟你說到這裡,你還是請其他大大幫你修吧

    良心建議

    你這句也怪怪的

    The door is going to be a transparency door with a golden curved line handle

    雖然我還沒有看完......

    參考資料: 遊學+大學的親身經驗
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